Open Hands

You decide the meaning....

Everyone writes of two forces in life

Pain and happy coinciding in strife

Love always heals while pain will cry

To take us from living in hopes to die

Twist this thought to a better level

Take the pain make it a small pebble

Love is greater than a large divide

Its something we all hold dear inside

Pain and despair slip away in a fraction

Because it offers no greater satisfaction

Love remains great because we can feel

With it comes the reward of much zeal

Hate makes us momentary monsters

A fraction of time a world of doubters

Love suspends our hearts just as well

Without it we no know difference to tell

So now open your hands to what you see

A loving heart glowing so passionately

Embrace it with all that you can provide

Here pain won’t exist you have it inside

Reviews

[Willard Wells]

First line "write" to "writes" "Love is greater the a large divide" to "Love is greater than a large divide". "Love remain great because we can feel" to "Love remains great because we can feel

A very nice piece that speaks of loving overcoming all. Well Done.

[Bohrium Guy]

Thanks for the corrections I noted them after post. I often write raw what comes to mind or what I feel with little attention to correction sometimes. All good and well taken. Thanks again for the review and constructive critic.

~Rob~

[Willard Wells]

I expected you had not proofed it completely. I did not give you much time once posted. hahaha

[Bohrium Guy]

Its cool brother I am pretty durable. :)

[ANTO]

While I agree that hate can be transient - it only need be transient but able to travel like a mexican wave at a baseball game around again and again to remain.
If we could work out that we only have to sit down (Lennon said lie down, in a bed) for it to dissipate and allow love in.
You writing isn't entirely fluid to me - (is English your second language?) but it does present a golden thread that can be followed from start to finish and which is profound.

[Bohrium Guy]

Actually I am multilingual and a old timer here. While I agree fluidity may not be the best the write itself presents the imagery. Thanks for your input and review.

[ANTO]

Im not exactly a new face here either BG. You're welcome for the review. :)

[Bohrium Guy]

I remember you well...

[ANTO]

my memory is not so good...

[Bohrium Guy]

It's all good, no worries...

[ANTO]

*smiles* ....

[B]

such a promising write
and a very real one

i guess no matter
love finds a way
and goodness will always rise

[Bohrium Guy]

Thank you Nisreen I really appreciate your review. Have a great day!

~Rob~