Kinda an expression of how I see my life and self....
Alone I stand, shackled to a wet and cold brick wall. That suffocating musty feeling, the wetness of it all. Sounds of moisture drops hitting beneath my feet Single stream of light landing on the floors concrete
A crack was shown not much to my visions detail Every day I watched, wondering why I am in jail Clock ticking day by day, still chained I will remain Watching in the darkness, eyes blurred from my sustain
Hearts heavy, my chest breathing slow in its release Only darkness is my life, shall I never know the peace One day I don't know when the crack it moved a bit Dirt coming up, mounding like a gophers digging fit
I stood and waited to see what this oddity was about When much to my delight pops up a tiny little sprout I thought, how could this be a growth in my dark prison Yet somehow something tiny was growing in my vision
Daily standing glaring at this spot my attention drawn To that crack that light shines on that littlest of prawn Wondering what it would become, a vine or just a weed Doesn't matter I guess I won't be allowed to be freed
Walls of silence, my groans of pain are all I ever hear Peering once again to gaze, a stem, a single leaf appear Something actually was growing in my darkened cold cell Enlighten my soul, the only saving grace from this hell
The plant it grew as I straddled growing old and dying Till a bloom of flower showed, colors bold and shining I laughed hanging from my walls cuffs and binding chains That a thing of beauty grows in my cell of maddening pains
I watched the flower grow till its stem could no longer fit Slowly watching it tender no longer a flower would it sit I knew right then, this is what will surely become of me Withering without love, darkness and silence my insanity.
First of all... wow. Just wow. This was such an amazing read, the imagery from this was outstanding. I could actually see where this was happening in my head and could feel how the flower saw this glimmer of another plant growing, only to see it not fit in its proper place. Beautiful! Second, the flow was absolutely amazing, easy to read and 100% amazing. Great write!
You threw me into a strange world with this one. it has a psychedelic effect. A very beautiful piece that has gotten buzzing through my imagination with inspiration. A brilliant write and breathtaking read.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thanks brother I try to inflict my imagination the best I can. Thanks again for your review.
i loved this. and well i saw this and i saw yours and my friendship and what a friend can do to save someone. no matter how small. the imagery in all of this is beautiful. the feeling of being restrained and the reason to be unknown just like when like binds you and refuses life, but then out of no where the smallest amount of light can be a restoration.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Even the smallest fractions of hints serve it's purpose. Sometimes looking through the eyes of a str.. read moreEven the smallest fractions of hints serve it's purpose. Sometimes looking through the eyes of a stranger can reveal what we really see inside and how we feel. Embrace the moment, its light a candle flickering in the night.... Thanks for your review.
First of all... wow. Just wow. This was such an amazing read, the imagery from this was outstanding. I could actually see where this was happening in my head and could feel how the flower saw this glimmer of another plant growing, only to see it not fit in its proper place. Beautiful! Second, the flow was absolutely amazing, easy to read and 100% amazing. Great write!
This...Is absolutely amazing. I Iove the detail and raw emotion. The structure is very smooth and allows the piece to flow very nicely. I love this. Thank you for sharing.
A intense, powerful and emotional ride in the poetry.
"I watched the flower grow till its stem could no longer fit
Slowly watching it tender no longer a flower would it sit
I knew right then, this is what will surely become of me
Withering without love, darkness and silence my insanity."
The above lines are classic. I felt the mind falling to bad places. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Bohrium Guy. This poem is expressed so well with rhyme and it flows with personal feelings. I have to take a moment because the message you send out is so intense, powerful, dark, sad.. yet there is still a shimmer of hope in the mist of all of this.. but always remember..“The flower that blooms in adversity is the rarest and most beautiful of all.” stay strong.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
This actually is just a thought of moment not a feeling of me. I wrote it thinking if I were that ma.. read moreThis actually is just a thought of moment not a feeling of me. I wrote it thinking if I were that man in the cell type idea. Not to be confused with my current emotional state. Although Jack and Coke sound nice at the moment.... Thanks for your review!
8 Years Ago
I'll take that jack & coke myself:)) lol wow ! good for that and good to know:) what an imagination.. read moreI'll take that jack & coke myself:)) lol wow ! good for that and good to know:) what an imagination you have..keep up the GREAT work !! ... you're welcome and you'll see me again..wow!! you are good writer!!
Just words of expression...
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