I Loved It Still

Warning: Very sad topic. Read at your own discretion. "I should have been it's saviour."

The pain still sends me reeling, its echoes still resound
Knew not the beauty of a cry 'til it never sounds
Talons clawed at my arms and pried It from my grasp
Not He or She for It never lived, no first breath or last
My chest is empty as my womb, a gruesome sight I'm sure
But none grotesque as my mind, for which there is no cure
A year may pass, some more may follow
It's hard to keep track when you're just so hollow
The grave never grows, though a living one should
But a corpse never does as we wish that it would
I can pray there for hours, I can pray there for days
My heart, my mind; imprisoned in anguished daze
I'll never name It. I'll never hold It nor know It.
I love It still, though I will always be unfit
They say it was random, could have happened to anyone
- but it happened to me, no matter their opinion
It's death is on my hands, It's life is my failure
From It's first moment, I should have been It's saviour.

Author's Note

Sorry to any and all especially effected by this topic, but a friend of mine requested I write something like this for her and it was quite beyond me to deny her.

Reviews

[AliciaB]

Yes, this is an incredibly sad topic... but this is an incredibly beautiful poem. The rhythm is pretty sound throughout, and the rhyme scheme fits very well with the structure. The imagery gives the entire piece a touching and poignant tone. I want to point out my favorite lines, because these are just incredible: "Not He or She for It never lived, no first breath or last"... "My chest as empty as my womb"... "The grave never grows, though a living one should / But a corpse never does as we wish that it would" (that is one of the most beautiful couplets I ever read - Shakespeare worthy!)... and finally, the most powerful line of all: "From It's first moment, I should have been It's savior." You have done an excellent job of capturing such profound emotions in this piece. Seriously - I'm not making this up just to sound nice. This is amazing. It's beautiful in a terrible way. Outstanding work.

[Blysful]

I can't thank you enough. This particular poem means a lot to me due to the friend I wrote it for, and you've made me extremely happy to know that I didn't let her down when she asked me to write this :) thank you so much!

[AliciaB]

You are very welcome!

[Érenn]

This has not been reviewed, i am trying to figure out why. No, that is just me trying not to think of this powerful poem, that shook me to the core. yeah funny thing i may not have experienced but someone else had shared their sorrows about a very similar thing. I won't waste your time or mine by sharing that. What i want to convey is that i understand and the impression will stay fresh for sometime in me.

[Blysful]

This poem was always meant to be powerfully thought provoking, and for a long time I thought it had failed in that. So thank you, really thank you! For telling me that I did do the topic justice :)