A Rich Substance

Something beautiful happens
When life overflows
Like the chance meeting
Of duelling banjos

You play the guitar
Much better than me
On your lonely nights
While I ran free

Then love finally turns up
Unsteady on the nerves
A flowing rich substance
More than anyone deserves

Reviews

[albee]

"more then anyone deserves"
the illusive illusion of the mythical orgasm
"when life overflows'
in its prime directive:
eat-survive-reproduce.
music is the food of love.
love is mother nature's trick
to get us to make babies.

[Betty Hermelee]

Love is that rich substance that you found....especially when you meet someone unexpectedly . You never know what will happen. I like the dueling banjos as symbol of entwining together at last.
Well done.
Best, B

[albee]

oh that substance...the divine
sweetness and music I feel in your rhymes...

[Gaurav]

this is a very soothing poem..i would love to see the motivation behind it..but all in all, very awesome

[likesgreeneggsandham]

Wow this is very moving in its elegant simplicity. Makes me think of dreamy, warm Summer nights. Lovely.

[Insight "MH"]

I had a warm feeling while reading this. Thank you for sharing.

[Leslie Philibert]

A good feeling poem that races along, well written!

[Onlyme]

Simply loved this flows to perfect each verse and great images are conjurned up inside my minds eye. Made me smile, feel good. And enjoyed to the max.

[LylaCrystal]

I loved the melody of the verses. The images are so vivid and lively. Great job!

[Davidgeo]

There's some hopefulness to this. Life is a gift no one really deserves, it's kind of what makes it so precious.