This Is My Prayer

To all my friends and family and all the amazing people I'll never forget. Nakama

~)~

Give them strength when they need it the most,

Give them peace, something to toast.

Give them a smile I will never see,

Fill their hearts with eternal glee.

~*~

Please filter the hate that reaches their ears,

And give them the courage to face all their fears.

Give them a song to sing through the day,
And keep the horrid demons at bay.

~*~

Give them hope when times are black,

Cast an ecouraging wind to their back.

Let laughter tickle their lips,

And fun times breach their trips.

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Erase all the pain and hurt inside,

Show them the calm beyond the coming tide.

Give them shelter, be their guide,

Teach them to fly intsead of glide.

~*~

Let live all their dreams,

Weave love into their seams.

'Til their eyes twinkle like the stream,

This is the prayer that I deem.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Bright Ocean Star]

Bluefire, this is beautiful. I'm saving this in my favorites. Keep writing. I have more space in my favorites' file. I need you to fill it up. Thank you for sharing this.

[Bluefire]

Thank you! I may, depends on the day.

[LunarSong]

This has beautiful flow and such a beautiful message. I just love it through and through.

[Bluefire]

Thank you!

[LunarSong]

You're welcome :)

[Rachelle]

A selfless prayer, indeed! Beyond the "give me's" and the "bless me's" should be a heart who loves others....

[Bluefire]

Daw, thanks! ^^

[New Theory]

This should be the official prayer of everyone. This is from today mine. I love this and I will use it for my prayer today. This alone would do, god will understand.

[Bluefire]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review. ^^
I'm glad you like it!

[New Theory]

You are welcome :)

[❀Subaru_Nyaa!
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This poem is really good,it's so good that I am jealous of it and I just realized that I never knew what glee means until now.

[Bluefire]

Daw, I did something right!
Thank you muchly!
Cuuutteee profile pic by the way. ^^

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

I needed this today thank
you this made me smile.


I love Pinks music I have her Misunderstood
CD. perfect song to go with a Beautiful write.


My favorite Stanza's lines here.

Please filter the hate that reaches their ears,

And give them the courage to face all their fears.

Give them a song to sing through the day,
And keep the horrid demons at bay.



Blessings. kindred poet

[Bluefire]

=3 I'm so glad you liked it, Benita!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

It's a pleasure my friend. You're very welcome. I enjoy reading your work. blessings. kindred poet

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮This made me smile (: And the song you put with it is perfect for the poem.╰☆╮

[Bluefire]

Yay! I made you smile! =D
Thank you muchly for readingand reviewing! ^^

[C. Rose]

"Give them a song to sing through the day,
And keep the horrid demons at bay."

"laughter tickle their lips"

"filter the hate "

"Weave love into their seams."

The above are the lines I thought you did particularly well.

Consider replacing glide with slide. In my opinion glide is not different enough from fly, or at least not as strong an opposite.

I know rhyming can be awkward, and sometimes you have to just let it be - but the dream/deem rhyme is your last impression. and "prayer that I deem" feels cut off. What about 'scream'?

As always. You are the author. I don't have the authority to tell you what to do. Just offering some possibilities.

This song brings back fun memories :)

[Bluefire]

You're amazing! =o
Honestly, you have picked my brain because I was thinking them things as I wrote this.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! ^^

[Emily]

I love this poem! (And the song!)

[Bluefire]

Thank you! Pink ish awesome x3