Green envious eyes

You see me from across the room,

My eyes keep wandering,

Getting a glimpse of you,

In those deep green eyes I want to be,

It ashame my eyes have turned green with envy.

 

You look over here,

Across the crowded room,

But you are looking right through me,

Looking for her.

 

She will never understand,

How much she had got,

You in her life,

That is all she should want,

But instead taking for granted,

Your precious love,

I'd die to have a taste,

Just one small bite.

 

As you look across the room,

You look for the one who you love,

While the one that loves you,

Is sat all alone,

Wishing to be the one,

You are looking for.

Author's Note

I hope this is good :/ not quite sure tbh, just random sentences thrown together, I tried to make it good but I don't think I did :L x

Reviews

[Jill Wallflower]

aww ): I like this, its well written x

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

this is somewhat understandable, even if you dont understand it.. :L

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

The wanting to been seen, but the jealous eyes see much more. Good poem.

[Maggie]

"I'd die to have a taste,
Just one small bite."

We all know that feeling. Keep putting your stuff out there, and don't care if it's "good" or not. Expression is more important.

[SpokenWord]

As a writer or poet we are our own hardest critiques as we see the potential in our work, we know where we want it to go but to us it falls short. As far us reader though we get to enjoy the writes and we get to take something away from it. Envy is a powerful force or emotion and you captured a slice of someone's mind who is extremely envious of someone else. Your poem to me is good, it tells a story that we can all relate too. Nice job.

[Sukriti Suki]

You did a very good job expressing this emotion.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is very good, i understand you 100%... its always the girls that don't appreciate him that get the best guys in the world that treat them like goddesses and those girls just don't give a f**k and treat the poor guy like s**t

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Wouderful job.

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

"She will never understand,
How much she had got,
You in her life,
That is all she should want,
But instead taking for granted,
Your precious love,
I'd die to have a taste,
Just one small bite."

This stanza was wonderful. I could relate to this piece a lot. Outstanding write. Keep writing :)

[zappy]

you didnt make it good you mande it great.