Pain of life

Who would of guessed,

This warm feeling of rope burn,

Gently soothes my neck,

Soon to cause deadly pain,

Is going to end everything.

 

Who would of realized,

That the thin slither of steel,

That glistens in the light,

Will cause rivers of ruby,

The copper scent in the air.

 

Who would of found out,

The poison,

Not designed for me,

Fits into my system perfectly,

Each bite,

The taste of freedom.

 

You would of known,

How to stop the pain,

You would of helped,

Blank canvas' of people,

Stand and stare,

You would of been the one blinking,

Trying to hold back the tears.

Author's Note

Hope this is okay, I just had a random idea for this so I appologise if its not that good :) x

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

who would have thought? I like that phrase as we never think before hand only in hindsight does things make sense. I like the description in each verse how you described it and then described the affect of it on life. Rope burn can be a good thing at times in the right situation but yes it can also end life in the wrong situation. I like the contrasts painted in your poem. Great work.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

This is deep my friend, well written.

[Jvl narasimharao]

Your poem is nice

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Brillantly written, in some ideas of pain it can be beautiful.....

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

O.O
Traumatised...
Great write, it's amazing!
You really do get your feelings out through poetry :P xx

[Wandering Soul]

Very well done. I loved "Each bite, The taste of freedom." and "Blank canvas' of people"

It seems to me anyway that the random idea as you call it works the best.
Great job.

[Jill Wallflower]

Wow, this is so good, so well written, so sad ): Well done x