Whisper

Social Commentary

You watch and wane
Curse and complain
About how the world has you strain
And you've had enough of the pain
Your accomplishments disdain
From hatred you cannot refrain
Cant clean so you smear the bloodstain
You say its too much to sustain

We all have battles, there are those we cannot win alone
Do not whisper, but SHOUT and let you heart felt desires known

If the schemer plots, make his plan be foiled
Dont let the slothful slide, snobbish are the spoiled
If you see the slayer kill, reveal him
Catch the theif with his loot, before he conceals them

These are the things in the world that threaten us
A mere needle that sticks us that gets crisper
Why does evil prosper? We whine and fuss
One reason is quite simple........We whisper

Reviews

[indieRokker]

Nice ryhme-scheme, it worked, even if a tad overdone, it still fits, it flows and you hit it right at points where needed. I liked the message we aren't prepared to be heard that we fail to ask for help, we try to hold back and wait for someone/something else prepare itself and fix our mistakes, that we can't speak up for ourselves.

"We all have battles, there are those we cannot win alone"
^^Favourite lines, they speak for itself. Nicely written.

indie♥

[Elaine]

Great job. i love the flow of it all.

[Levioshock]

well done!