Your Smile

We've built dreams together now

laughing off problems and smiling through

as you curved your smile that fits me

it was so good, and it felt so right

I stayed with you for a long time now

and you never let go of our dreams 

just like me holding your hand in the street

staring at your smile that makes me smile

And you know that I'll do anything for you

just to see that smile that I like

no sea is deep for me to reach for you

so you won't feel lost and down 

I want to take you in the highest mountain

and see the sun setting behind them

to see you smile with your curly hair

is a future I see in your beautiful eyes.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful, hopeful and wonderful words for love. I liked the complete poem. Thank you Christian for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Anjali]

Lovely words! Commitment of a lover describing the little joys of togetherness, I really enjoyed reading this journey.
Thank you again for sharing such an excellent poem with me.
God bless you dear always.

[Shannon]

I especially enjoyed the progression. The small joys to the large declaration of commitment.

[Hebe]

Lovely words, made me smile :)

[Valentine]

When love comes it pays to grasp it with both hands. Valentine

[JayG]

You've written a letter to someone you know, talking about things only you know about. Great for her, but given that readers are looking to be entertained, how does what's said apply to the reader?

For this kind of thing to apply to the reader it must either resonate with them so far as their own experiences, or be so beautifully said that the reader is moved to enjoy it for that, and perhaps show it to the one s/he feels that way about. For example, Shakespeare's, How Do I Love Thee.

My point is that instead of telling the reader how you feel, make them fall in love with this person.
In other words, Entertain, as against informing.

[wordman]

a beautiful valentine tribute to your love