Roses

I wasn't ready for it all

My eyes were closed and heart beats fast

"Surprise!" you said as my lips curved

My chest went warm with all your love

You gave me roses from the streets

And they grew and reached my heart

They told me how you love and care

That you will live for my only sake

Each day I wake, I water them

They grow and grow with all my love

Our love grow along with the roses

With tender care, that forever we'll share

Days passed, the roses grew fast!

I touched them but got picked by its thorns

As you and I grew like the roses

Beautifully shining with nightmares behind

The roses didn't last long

One by one petals fall like domino

You and I, we're bound to love together

But you told me "No, this isn't forever"

I never wanted to see roses again

For I see you in them, it pains my heart

Like the roses, my heart died with you're gone

It was a drought in my heart

The roses went dry inside my heart

As you left me all alone in this place

Drying up, losing hope in my life

But I cried, As I watered myself

I survived the darkness in my brain

Like a rose about to die

And was watered by myself

I now see that I have to live for my own.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Roses, love and life. A amazing story told in the poetry.
"I survived the darkness in my brain
Like a rose about to die
And was watered by myself
I now see that I have to live for my own."
I liked the logic of the above lines. We must bleed to know how to live. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this early review! I appreciate it so much! :) :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Anjali]

Splendid! Thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem about roses, love and failed relationship. The last two lines are hope and display the strength to survive through failed relationship and stand up for oneself.

[shyla]

This is like most relationship failures, there will always be that one thing that reminds you of a person you had a connection with rather its good or bad. perfect description :)

[Hebe]

Great love story ... loved the metaphors you used, fragile like a rose....great work!

[wordman]

love can bring pain,like a rose it needs it`s rain

[Valentine]

Many things do not last forever, Valentine

[FIN]

Great story-telling through the use of metaphor/similes likening a healthy then putrefying rose, as ones hopeful romantic engagements ensue.

This story held my attention by the power of that rose, the connection heavy and symbolism strong.

I also enjoyed how you ended on the fact that you must water yourself and live on your own, which most don't understand (to have a fruitful relationship, one must~first~be fruitful within ones foundation of existence, before exploring elsewhere "a partnership").

The imagery, message, storyline, progress, all wonderful. I highly enjoyed this piece.

Thank you.

Much love,

LR

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this early review! I appreciate it so much! :D