Snakes

Life is hard like rocks in mountains

Aiming at me, but I'm not talking

Crying alone with no one home

Weeping inside the walls I built

No one knew that my eye teared blue

With their lies running in my head

Making me feel sick all the time

It's hard living in a world filled lies

Invented stories and backstabbing friends

Friends? Are they? But they hiss like snakes

Venom running in my mind so active

But heart's immune to such poison

Every day I woke up with this

But now I learned to ignore such fuss

Today, move on and live for the future

Or be stuck from yesterday's hell.

Reviews

[D Connolly]

With friends like that, it's not surprising to feel sick all the time! Good to ignore that stuff and move into a brighter future

[Valentine]

Here I was leery about reading about snakes. No one in life has it easy all of the time. Learn to accept the bad with the good and you will be much happier. Valentine

[Hebe]

very potent words... has a lot of emotion, ....takes you there....

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this review!

[Alyssa Jensen]

I really like the lines, "Today, move on and live for the future / Or be stuck from yesterday's hell." I like how the ending has some hope in it compared to the sorrow in the first few stanzas. I really liked this poem!

[Christian Bonoan]

Thank for this review :) I'm glad you liked it :)

[Paul Bell]

As life goes on, friends you thought were friends diminish, leaving the true ones to see you through.

[Christian Bonoan]

That is so true :) thanks for this review :)

[AUU]

I like the imagery. I like the story you're telling. I do wish the snakes were somehow connected into the first stanza, but it's poetry. So it's not about me.

;)

Thanks for sharing.

[Hanah Gotski]

This poem brings out the emotions of pain, hurt, loss of trust and helplessness so perfectly! World is indeed a cruel place but all we can do is wait and hope that things will get better.

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this review Hanah :) I appreciate it :)

[aLittlePain]

Hello Christian,

Ana (Papaya) said pretty much what I took from this. It's especially hard when they are people we love and care for. That uncertainty becomes embedded in every interaction there after. Very nice piece. R xo

[Papaya]

It's a sad moment when we realize that life and the people in it are not perfect. It changes us and how we evaluate and react to things.

[Christian Bonoan]

Yup! I sometimes think that everyone is full of hatred and people cannot forgive small sins. Thank you for this review :)