Olivia

Poor Ms. Olivia whose love is painted

Red and blue and all the faded rainbow

Gone with the freshly moves down so crooked

But shone so bright as if life is sorrow

 

Oh Olivia why’re you so deeply blind?

Your yesterday is crying and so scarred

True that what your love is nothing but kind

But life is so not fair so you’ll just die hard

 

Oh Olivia I love you so tender

My heart is so pouring just for your likes

But your eyes don’t shine like the way they were

So is it or not? But your love’s all stripes

 

Oh Olivia, butterflies are with you

But why does he left you down and fell?

So life’s not so fair so he went gone and flew

Mad! You’re so mad but you’re ugly as hell

 

Oh Olivia, you cried like the blue sky

So alone and selfishly rolling down

Your eyes so swollen as you deeply cry

In the mountains up, so you’re never down

 

Oh Olivia, old and newly crumpled

Then Days passed but why’re you’re still in that past

Where you died and lost your soul, so crumbled

Nightmare it is for you in that dark past

 

Oh Olivia why’re you so envious?

You’re free but why still cry in dark of nights?

One by one your soul’s dying but cautious?

So Sun came, all is gone, you’re all in white

Reviews

[Kelsey Ann]

Very good piece. My favorite line: "nightmare it is for you in that dark past". Good job!

[Neal S]

Now this I really dig! Very nice!

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks Neal! You're so nice!

[Megan]

I love this, there's such simple passion and love, while being so subtle and almost mysterious. Beautiful!

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks megan! this poem is actually one of my favorites :) thanks for loving it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of verse and tale.
"Oh Olivia, you cried like the blue sky
So alone and selfishly rolling down
Your eyes so swollen as you deeply cry
In the mountains up, so you’re never down"
The above lines were my favorite. The description alive and realistic in the poetry. I did like the closing lines. Thank you Christian for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Christian Bonoan]

Thank you for this positive review :) this means a lot to me :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Nwang]

It was a real treat to read this poem. Loved every bit of it.

[Jade]

Oh wow! I really loved this write, it's like a ballad of the sort. very well written.