The Stars That I Look At

Walking pencils and dancing minds

That’s what I see always in you

Your wit kills and your heart inspires

We’re clays waiting to be mold by you

 

Your talents and all inspires all

You made me feel that I am existing

Like the moon exists in the daylight

And stars that shine in my ceiling

 

You helped me find my way to things

And all the ways I’ll walk through soon

You touched my life like a mother did to me

Thank you for all, as you’re the star in the sky.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Hopeful and kind words. I enjoyed the complete poem. Thank you Christian for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[barleygirl]

Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! It's sooo refreshing to read a love poem that literally sings with originality! It's so gratifying to read a love poem that focuses on the precious nuances that define something super special in the way the beloved makes the narrator feel. I'm so sick of love poems that just deal with the clichés of appearance & attraction. Here you've painted a solid portrait of someone who has enriched the beloved's life in so many interesting & memorable ways. I love this becuz it's what love really looks like.

[Christian Bonoan]

Thank You for this review!! I appreciate this so much!

[Jenny Leigh]

Another good poem. Short but makes it's statement.

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this review :)

[Valentine]

Very nice touching write. Made me think back to time with my parents. Lovely write. Valentine

[Shannon]

A beautiful tribute to someone special. I agree with Mitch's suggestion below. Well done!

[Mitch]

Very sweet write. I don't think it's necessary to contract "We're". You could probably use "We are", but consider changing mold to molded to match the verb tense. "We are clays waiting to be molded by you".

I enjoyed the piece. Good job.

[Nwang]

This is magnificent. Loved your poem. Thanks for sharing.

[D Connolly]

I love it! Very nice. It makes me think of all the people who have inspired me in my life

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this review :) I thought of the same way when I wrote this :)

[aLittlePain]

Lovely piece, the opening stanza is nothing short of masterful. R xo

[Christian Bonoan]

Thank you for this review :) I appreciate this :)

[Chase Weik]

Absolutely brilliant. So much meaning and so thoughtful. I love it! Keep it up!

[Christian Bonoan]

Thank you for this review :) you're so nice :)