Girl in hell

Poem about a girl that is in psychological hell on earth because of her deceased father.

She is crying again
The girl sits through the night
Tears stream her beautiful puffy face
How much can she take

She might grasp grip
She looks at her face
She sees an ugly with no body
A spirit who deserves this pain

She is pushed near the edge
And starts screaming for help

"Where once I saw a cliff
Descending down I wanted
Single I was
With no one helping
The rising hand from below
Is offering to start pulling
Help me before I jump"

Author's Note

Poem about a girl that is in psychological hell on earth because of her deceased father.

Reviews

[unshakenScene]

this is reallyreally good:)

[.......]

the deep end is a quite a profound place to be. Nicely written

[Rob Santana]

Really strong piece, well penned.

[BlueBackSpeller]

Thank you, for your presence. I will continue on the drafting board. Anybody seen dlpaget.

[Rob Santana]

I Haven't seen Mr. Paget in a while.

[Lonesome Traveler]

Very thought provoking and hard hitting. You convey the anguish and utter hopelessness.

[BlueBackSpeller]

Thank you, I wanted to describe the situation of the girl then add dialogue of what was going on in her mind. I will watch punctuation and appreciate you taking the time to provide advice.

[Lonesome Traveler]

I think its good that the situation and internal dialogue are seperate. Its shows that whatever people do to try and work someone out, they can never fully understand what is going on in someone elses heart and soul. And even if they do, it will be far too late.

[BlueBackSpeller]

That is exactly what happened, according to the girl she and her father fought a lot then he passed away and she feels something.

[not one]

deep piece, personal but good

[BlueBackSpeller]

There was a girl in a confusion state, and wrote the poem to show her an image for her to make the right decision. Thank you for your interpretation.