DEEP ACHES

Singing Billy-jean

Add a tonic to my gin

Then try to forget that scene

But am aching deep within

What did you do to me?

Am not always like this!

I thought of just your kiss

It unnerved me, yes it did!

Even nature’s mocking me

Mating with such glee

Reminds me of you and me…

I have to forget that scene

It’ll kill me, yes it will!

But I won’t with just a gin

Not even if I keep

Singing Billy-jean

Reviews

[nathan]

hehehehehehehe!!!!

[Mwash]

I like how it flows so effortlessly...great work

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

This piece is an amazingly sleek piece of work :)

[M.Babu]

haha this would go nicely in person. It truly flows lyrically as if it's a song. haha forgetting takes a hell of a lot more than we give it credit for. Very nicely put this was very good. I flowed along with it:)

[Rossen]

A very lyrical piece! had to think if you liked the kiss.
The tempo says yes, the word unnerved threw me
a bit, nothing bad here just made me think..

just read the review two below after my comment

[Gull]

I love it!
Good picture.

[Angela]

sounds like it has song lyric possibilities? nice.

[Coyote Poetry]

Gin and tonic couldn't help me too much. I needed a Long Island ice tea to bury my memories. A very good poem. I try to hide from my emotion a few times. Sooner or later they come out and make us remember what we are missing. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Casper]

Hmm... This is rather interesting, I know I say this a lot when I comment, but... It is. I like it.