MIRROR

ever woken up only to realize who you think you are is not who you really are?

I met her today

A reflection of me

But not quite me

 

She has my eyes

In league with the stars

But their glitter is marred

 

And she wills a smile

So much like mine

Only broken, somewhat vile

 

She wears my face

Only mine is a facade

Of beauty, poise and grace

 

And within her is my spirit

But the aura that comes with it

Is heavy with tormented spirits

 

And I met her only today

That reflection of me

Has become me

Author's Note

I sort of had fun with this one and i can relate to it,tell me what you think

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very much echoes sylvia plath's "mirror"--

almost a denial of what she has become both physically and on the inside...

we change, looks change, the inner being changes...and we just don't want to accept that has happened.

i really like your poem, even with the echoes, it is unique to you...well worded.

jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very much echoes sylvia plath's "mirror"--

almost a denial of what she has become both physically and on the inside...

we change, looks change, the inner being changes...and we just don't want to accept that has happened.

i really like your poem, even with the echoes, it is unique to you...well worded.

jacob

[Awkward]

I like the complexity that came with the simplicity. Thank you for sharing. Very nice poem.

[Angela]

I love this poem, The dawning light and acceptance of who we really are. Only one critique, the rest is such a haunting, slow, awakening to reality that the ending feels too abrupt. Beautiful, as usual, however.

[Steph's Script]

Very nice peace. It's simple but complicated at the same time. I really liked how you used a rhyming scheme without making it sound cheesy, lol, very hard to do now and days. I also liked how you ended the poem, very strong and powerful. Good job

[Rossen]

I think it stands tall great feelings reflected.
sweet finish...


And I met her only today

That reflection of me
Has become me

[Coyote Poetry]

They is logic in this poem. Easy to think we are better or worst then who we see looking back at us in the mirror. Took me many years to understand. The most important person to like you. Is the person you see in the mirror looking back. I like the ending to this strong poem. A excellent poem. You made me think again.
Coyote

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

...
OK, I had to read this twice to make sure...i think this is your best piece yet. No, I'm sure. Yes, it is...I love how the stanzas are short, and so weighty!and the rhyme!
I also love the way youve interwoven the whole looking in a mirror/discovering yourself theme....great work on that.
"I met her today
A reflection of me
But not quite me..." i love that line, some of the stuff here is really striking, like -
"She has my eyes
In league with the stars
But their glitter is marred"
and
"She wears my face
Only mine is a facade
Of beauty, poise and grace"
love the last stanza as well...awesome job!!!

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

Not bad at all i love the portrayal of love as a "vile smile" :D

[SINDE]

I like the simplicity of your piece. It's deep and it has a wonderful flow. It's simply great. Keep it up.