Wanna

Very violent!

I wanna break your fingers

I wanna rip out your throat

For all the bullshit that you've said

I wanna see you choke

 

I wanna cut your tongue out

I wanna make you bleed

For all the tears you've made me cry

I wanna hear you scream

 

I wanna slice your hands off

I wanna crack your ribs

For all the insults you've thrown my way

I wanna watch you cry

 

I wanna gouge your eyes out

I wanna slit your wrists

For all the times you've mocked me so

I wanna pull out your hair

 

I wanna crush your ankles

I wanna carve out your heart

For all the ways you've tormented me

I wanna bury you alive

Author's Note

Written during a really bad fit of anger.

Reviews

[Tony]

A poem in which the first person desires to violate physically someone who has slandered, hurt, insulted, mocked and tormented them.
Someone forgot about ...sticks and stones..may break my bones..

I cannot see any reason or significant point, nor amusing anecdote or disguised black humor in this piece at all.
It is pretty much devoid of entertainment value.
However this type of fantasy writing or bizarre attempts to unite apathy and art, seems to be all the rage with many young writers.

Apathy and art can indeed be combined, but the author will need to go deeper inside the sickness to articulate it in such a fashion as to shock and impress the reader.
It is not without impact. It depressed me profoundly in it's portrayal of ignorance concerning Values and human decency.

This poem succeeds only in that it is rhythmic.
Or it would make decent metal lyrics.

I have read quite a bit of your work Thief Lord, and I think you have a knack for writing.
But I think you are faulting quality inspiration.