Loneliness vs. Love

He creeps in at night,
Taking a generous bite.
I feel my heart crack,
I know he's back.

My heart screams,
Loneliness he beams.
His job well done,
He laughs at his pun.

I can't run from him,
He fills me to the rim.
And just like that I'm shattered,
I'm old, ugly, and battered.

"No one likes you."
He laughs at this too.
"Who could love something so worn?
Over you no one would morn."

"So take that knife, stab it into your chest,
Don't worry honey it's for the best."
I touch the sharp knife,
Contemplating my life.

Who would care?
This pain I can't bare.
He smiles at me,
"How hard can this be?"

I don't know where to turn,
My heart doesn't ever burn.
"Just do it. It's better this way.
You know you can't endure another day."

I hold the knife,
Ready to end the strife.
But then a man I see,
Tall and handsome is he.

He speaks, "Please don't,
For if you do, meet, we won't.
Please give me the chance to care"
Love begs "Please to me this isn't fair."

I am confused,
Yes still bruised.
Loneliness speaks,
My attention he keeps.

"Don't be fooled!
For he is easily cooled.
No one could ever love you!
You know what to do."

I look from loneliness to love,
Then to above.
I am torn,
Yes old and worn.

"Trust in me."
Love assures, "Together we'll be."
I but down the dagger,
Loneliness, he does stagger.

Love, he smiles at me,
"I knew you'd see."
I lay down in my bed,
For loneliness is dead.

My future is secure,
This pain I'll endure.
I know they'll both be gone,
With the light of dawn.

But One Will Return,
And For Him,
My Heart,
Will Finally Burn.

<3

Author's Note

Tell me what you think of the different colored text. Also if it's the right color for each character. :D I'm proud of this poem! :D

Reviews

[sammyj]

wow that was great, i really got captured in that world with your words.

[TylerG]

This is great I do like the different colors all works together nicely, very well written :)

[al25]

This is by far your best poem. Its amazing the words flow so well. This is so well written. Wow great job.

[Kala Benfield]

This was really good ! , i loved it! i personally like the colors the way they are. The purple is really nice.
The texture of the poem is really wonderful.
i agree with K8tlyn with the pun. Brainstorm some new words that rhyme, then it would be even better. But thats just my opinion(:

[K8lyn]

Gave me goose bumps :) great job...

except the "pun" thing in stanza 2 doesnt make much sense.
also i agree with Mermaidian_Fairy, on the colors.

[NickyGL]

the colors work great. this is a very good poem. i like this a lot PLEASE keep writing. :)

[Just Me]

I think loneliness should have been black and love should have been a bright read because black kinda symbolizes loneliness and death while bright red symbolizes love and passion. All in all I really liked it.