Loneliness vs. Love

He creeps in at night,
Taking a generous bite.
I feel my heart crack,
I know he's back.

My heart screams,
Loneliness he beams.
His job well done,
He laughs at his pun.

I can't run from him,
He fills me to the rim.
And just like that I'm shattered,
I'm old, ugly, and battered.

"No one likes you."
He laughs at this too.
"Who could love something so worn?
Over you no one would morn."

"So take that knife, stab it into your chest,
Don't worry honey it's for the best."
I touch the sharp knife,
Contemplating my life.

Who would care?
This pain I can't bare.
He smiles at me,
"How hard can this be?"

I don't know where to turn,
My heart doesn't ever burn.
"Just do it. It's better this way.
You know you can't endure another day."

I hold the knife,
Ready to end the strife.
But then a man I see,
Tall and handsome is he.

He speaks, "Please don't,
For if you do, meet, we won't.
Please give me the chance to care"
Love begs "Please to me this isn't fair."

I am confused,
Yes still bruised.
Loneliness speaks,
My attention he keeps.

"Don't be fooled!
For he is easily cooled.
No one could ever love you!
You know what to do."

I look from loneliness to love,
Then to above.
I am torn,
Yes old and worn.

"Trust in me."
Love assures, "Together we'll be."
I but down the dagger,
Loneliness, he does stagger.

Love, he smiles at me,
"I knew you'd see."
I lay down in my bed,
For loneliness is dead.

My future is secure,
This pain I'll endure.
I know they'll both be gone,
With the light of dawn.

But One Will Return,
And For Him,
My Heart,
Will Finally Burn.

<3

Author's Note

Tell me what you think of the different colored text. Also if it's the right color for each character. :D I'm proud of this poem! :D

Reviews

[Ryan Gonzalez]

The different colored text for sure is appropriate in this poem. I like how you give loneliness and love characteristics that make them like real people. The mood of the poem goes from sadness and despair to happiness and joy very smoothly and ends on a very high note. It was a great poem and I really enjoyed reading it. Good job!

[tegdirb5]

WOW!!!!!! That's AMAZING!!!!!! i love how you put loneliness and love together in a battle. i think hat the colors are great for the characters.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

You show a battle of wills against loneliness and love. Classic poem my friend.

[FJ Davis]

Knew you'd come out OK, Abbie--you are, after all, the creator of this poetic world.
I am, frankly, more impressed by the content, here, than any ink-color. Though relatively short, this poem has a saga-like feel; a good sense of the dramatic.
A very fine effort.

[Libby]

Love it, Really good c:

[White Ink]

Loved the scenario, very interesting n smart conversation. Congratulations for winning 6th place in "Life has taught me contest".

P.S yes you should be proud, well done :)

[GP]

You wrote on my poem and said it reminded you of one of yours so after searching I concluded that it is this one! And I see what you mean- our poems are A LOT a like! I love this poem! As dark and sad as it is, it is also inspiring- it encourages me to never listen to those voices that try to keep you from who you want to be!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the story in the poem. The decision to drown in loneliness or reach for love will come often in a life. I like how you set-up the poem. Like a question with the answer at the end.
"My future is secure,
This pain I'll endure.
I know they'll both be gone,
With the light of dawn."
A amazing poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[The old me]

That was really good. I dont normally like poems, but I started reading this and it just was so good. I really really enjoyed it.

[Joshy1128]

I was sucked in... instantly. I loved the different color text. It puts definitely helps