Quiet days and loving nights...with you

was sent the first line and told to do something with it...i laughed..hence the following.

I want quiet days and loving nights

With

You

And if not

You

Then why don’t

You

move the f*ck on

 

Cause I’m tired of

Hearing the drama

And the complaining

And what is

we going do’s

About what we know

Ain’t going to change

You

 

I’ma be me

You be You

And speaking of you

Everything

You

Do

Ain’t cute

 

You

Wake up in the morning

B*tching and moaning

You

Complaining about a job

That

You

Aint gonna leave

You

Talking about ya clothes

Don’t fit

And the water to hot

And the bed to hard

And we ain’t making love

No more

 

Quit then

But not before

You

Find another

Buy some more clothes

But loose some weight first

Just makes sense

Turn the water down

And scrub harder

Cause cold don’t get ya clean

And is the bed to hard

Or ya head to hard

Cause I agree we ain’t making

Love no more

Scoot over

 

 

You call me from work

Talking about who

You

 Bout to slap

When we both know

You

Can’t fight

 

You driving home talking about

Traffic to heavy

And old folks can’t drive

Honestly u can’t either

But hey

That’s

You

 

Pump ya brakes

 

No dinner ain’t done

Cause I ain’t cooked

And neither did

You

Cold cereal and milk

Is gonna have to do

 

No the clothes ain’t washed

Cause I ain’t feel like it

And neither did

You

Wear that cute sweater that

Don’t fit

You

 

Yeah I know is hot

But so do

You

 

Got quarters?

 

I’m tired and about to go

To bed early

Cause of

You

 

The water just right

The bed ain’t that hard

So I’ma sleep next to

You

 

And pray for some extra

Patience concerning

You

 

And that tomorrow..maybe

I’ll get a quiet day

And a loving night

With

you

 

 

Reviews

[Angel's Lady]

What a slice of real life! We all wanna live happily ever after, but, shiiiiiiiiiittt, first there's all this to deal with! I can totally relate to this piece! haha Mama said there'd be days like this; she didn't mention weekends, too! Great write! Great RANT, too! haha Matter of fact, this is going in my Favorites!

[bey]

"...Talking about who

You

Bout to slap

When we both know

You

Can't fight"

lol...classic. it gets like that sometimes. the reality of relationships. good write.

[Autumn Dawn Gorny]

I really like the duality in this poem, both comical-serious, hateful-hopeful very hard task to pull. Well done

[Pj]

That was so good! And you're saying your not much of a poet in your bio? You seriously have talent- the bluntness and rawness was awesome!
It was so funny and true- men are just as bad as women, if not moreso, about being annoying and carrying on about things that will never eventuate or be resolved.
FANTASTIC! You got it in one! And I loved:
"And speaking of you
Everything
You
Do
Ain't cute"

[Kori Ricketts]

lmao!!!!!!!!!!!!! that was hilarious!!! it was comical and yet serious all at the same time if that is at all utterly possible.