Death Be Kind

A letter so Death asking him to take her life instead of her taking it herself.

Death be kind, Death be gentle

 

Please come for me, let my life unwind

But for heaven sakes please be on time

I have been waiting so long to find your waiting hand

To follow you through the path of shadows and find the promised land

 

Death be kind, Death be gentle

 

My deranged mind seeks salvation

My broken heart wishes for reconsoliation

I fear the beast that resides in my soul

He rips and tears and claws a hole

 

Death be kind, Death be gentle

 

The voices scream, bark and chatter

Mocking me with their bitter laughter

She has given up they say, a coward- a child

I will leave I say in a little while

 

But Death be kind, and please be gentle

 

Take me now, instead of after

 

 

Reviews

[Shadow_Self]

It's interesting. Death comes when it wants. You can fight Death, embrace him, or simply leave him alone. All you can hope for is for your death not to hurt.

[Bats In The Belfry]

Who hasnt heard the darkness calling them. To feel defeated by life and powerless to turn it around. Yet not wanting to truly commit to surrender. Dark and haunting topic. Well written.

[jadda12]

Really like it. There can be a lot of irony here and I like that. She could get exactly what she wants, or she could live to 100, or she is waiting so long she ends up taking her own life and it is horrible and brutal. Good job

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting poem. Death is the great mystery. When he desire to come. Hard to stop. I like the desire of this poem.
"But Death be kind, and please be gentle"
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

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Amazingly awesome!!!
100/100

[Baby Ricochet]

Sweetness my experiences with death were far from kind and gentle. I like "the beast that resides in my soul" line. Reminds of a line I wrote somewhere "beast on a leash" but that context had to do with sex. I did enjoy reading your poem and I've an insight that may well be worthless but what the f**k, right? People who romanticize death are likely to have never had to deal with it and trust me, it's not kind or gentle, it's very final.I told you it would be a worthless insight cause it's f**k all to do with your poem. I'm just funny like that. Thanx...

[Madelyn Defray]

No I like that you offered insight. I know death is far from gentle and kind- you're right it's nothing more than final which is why in my poem the girl doesn't want to kill herself because she fears that it's an incureable end

[Walker Andreasen]

I feel that the choruses between the stanzas should have two lines, the second pertaining to the upcoming stanza. The one at the beginning was perfect (in my opinion) because it was leading into the topic of the poem. But for example:
"Death be kind, Death be Gentle.
Death be known I'm going mental.

My deranged mind seeks salvation..."
Because (to me) that stanza talks about all the things that are running through her mind. Her fears and her worries and her personal findings about her self. It's Not the fact that she's going crazy as some would read that and think.

"Death be kind, Death be Gentle.
Silence them, up on the mantle.

The voices scream, bark and chatter..."
Here talking about "them, up on the mantle" as in her peers looking down on her. Judging her. The "silence" pertaining to her telling them she's leaving.

I'm not trying to rewrite you work. It is in point of fact very lovely. I just think that for the flow of the poem that adding a second line to those two choruses would help. But if that is how you wrote it then that's how you wrote it. I know how that is. I hated it when my English teachers would tell me I was missing something or it actually "wasn't finished" and it was because that's how I wrote it. But like I said that's just my opinion. Otherwise, this is indeed an awesome poem! Keep it up!

[Josh]

I don't truly believe this to be an aspect of suicide but rather a fear of taking ones own life. Death be kind, death be gentle does not sound like a suicidal thought but rather a disdain for the act. It's common for everyone to have that "giving up" feeling but very few can be honest that it isn't easy. Courage is only truly found when you are on the edge of the building...though I have a lot of pity for many who suffer from this urge, it seems that you know that to commit such an act, no matter the reason, is difficult. Nice poem.

[Madelyn Defray]

My point exactly. She's pretty much asking for death to come and do it for her because she can't bring herself to the point of actually ending her own life. As humans we all fear death, it's natural and it's necessary for survival. Thank you very much for the review

I find this very disturbing but elegant at the same time. I like the way the words flow together! Overall, I really like it!

[♥ Kinnixk]

This sounds like a suicidal thought...I like the repetition and vocab. Great job :)