Wednesday

A Chapter by Blissful Sin

FULLY REVISED AND EDITED!!!

Wednesday:

Aban had cried himself to sleep last night and had now awoken his eyes layered with crust, sweat, and tears. His eyes were red and somewhat swollen; he had bags of dishonor and tiredness under his eyes, stuffy nose with a nasty stench lurking over his shadow. He was a mess. He started recalling all of the actions that took place the night before. How Lislue melted away from his touch by the fires power, how she screamed in agony and how her stepmother Mary was so angered yet relieved, all because of his stupidity and cowardice to protect her. Aban couldn't stand the visions and the emotions that was surging back to him he wailed and suffered so much that morning, he just laid there thinking about the nightmare that was burned inside his memories.

Later that day he had finally driven up the energy to get up from his wave of tissues and had gotten up to eat some lunch. He heated up another ramen cup, grabbed the home phone and crept back up into the dark gloomy cave he actually called a bedroom. As he solemnly snacked on the salt enriched steaming noodles, he decided to call the hospital to see how Lislue was doing if her condition had changed, although his condition was worse with the mauling of the dog and the numerous areas of melted skin, he had just as much of a right to worry only for himself. But Aban wasn't like that, he was modest and passionate for others safety, even though his parents weren't there for him, even though he was slowly dying through the week, even though he wasn't actually responsible for the incident. He still wanted his loved ones and friends to smile the way they always had even if that meant he couldn't smile ever again.

He phoned the hospital, Lislue picked up at the third ring.

“Dude I’m fine, really I am I told you that 3 times already now.”

“I’m just really worried about you, how’s your face and hair”.

“Don’t worry ‘bout it!” She beamed. “I just shaved it all off to a boy cut, and I must say that I look pretty damn fine! My scares aren’t that bad though, the docs gave me some special lotion so that the major ones can fade a little, but over all I think it makes me look pretty bad a*s sexy though!”

“Hahaha, ok that’s pretty reassuring, I’m just glad you’re not seriously injured…!”

“Why, feel in love with me so fast?”

“Now why would I fall in love with you” he chuckled.

“Pffft. Your just jelly of this peanut butter” she giggled.

They started chatting like old times; the heavy dejected atmosphere suddenly had lifted like wings soaring though the bodies of clouds. Aban was glad that he didn’t ruin her life and that they could still be together.

“Well, I’ll check up on you tomorrow then”.

“Mhmm can’t wait then, big daddy” she whispered.

Aban had blushed madly and told her to not whisper in his ear like that then hung up the phone. Then flopped on the bed and began to wonder into a slumber.

He found himself staring into the eyes of a Rottweiler its body inside out, organs pulsing and blood vein rushing all in view; he cannot move from this horrifying scene. It then slowly opens its powerful jaws and begins to heave till a gruesome, slick human figure slithers and jerks its way out of the dog’s throat. It falls onto the floor and starts to move in inhuman ways, cracking every bone in its disturbing body putting its arms around its back and slicing its shoulders, breaking its knees to make shape like an animal’s leg, twisting its head side ways to make it eyes face to the ground.

Revolting.

__________________________*LAST EDITS MADE*_____________________________

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Author's Note

**Update**

I'm really not sure how I did on the updated part of this chapter. If you have any suggestions, concerns, or comments, then please leave them in the comments. That would be very much appreciated.

-Indecisive Bliss

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annie lee

This is not a genre I feel comfortable about reviewing since I do not read books or stories of this type. But I will say you have some good action, and you went to some effort to sketch out Aban. The scenes where he is introspective and wrestling with his own conflicting emotions and desires are the scenes with the most punch. Your female character is a little thin and I fear, terribly stereo typed. But, hey, what do I know? It's been a long time since I was that young.
Your descriptions of surroundings are fairly good. But there is some clumsy wording in some of the sentences and some awkward phrasing. I appreciate your read request. Keep writing and keep trying.