Darling, You're Not Alone

She waves at the bare, vacant sky

In hope of someone looking up

And waving back

Maybe they were thinking of her too

The morning sun is born

Her subtle rays seep through her cheeks

Fuel her bones

And sends a shiver down her spine

She stands tall over the morning haze

Kissing the soil beneath her feet

It glazes over plains for miles

She knows she's not alone

There's someone else gazing upon the same vacant sky

She knows they're there

And sometimes

That's all she needed.

Reviews

[Irenic]

All lines are very amazing and beautifully written. The way you shared your view that a person is not alone, there is a sun to provide him or her energy and a warm of hope so on the other hand there is a soil and sand to provide him or her the jewel of being humble and furthermore the whole nature is around him or her to give him or her support and courage.

this is what I have understood from your poem.

It is amazing write. Keep writing and sharing. And yeah thanks for sharing it with all of us.

[Frank]

I know this poem is about the sun, so to make up for my last review here I go. Assuming you want a review and not just a platitude!


She waves at the bare, vacant sky
[suggestion: strike bare, vacant they don't do much... try empty or morning]
In hope of someone looking up
[I don't get these two lines, how can someone wave back if they are on the earth? You don't mean someone in the sky do you?]

And waving back
Maybe they were thinking of her too
The morning sun is born
Her subtle rays seep through her cheeks [suggest: its subtle rays...]
Fuel her bones [suggest: warm her bones]
And sends a shiver down her spine
She stands tall over the morning haze [suggest: it rises over the morning haze]
Kissing the soil beneath her feet

It glazes over plains for miles [the plains]
She knows she's not alone
There's someone else gazing upon the same vacant sky
She knows they're there
And sometimes
That's all she needed.

[Gee]

I do enjoy reading Frank's reviews .No platitudes(like that)as he ain't trying to win friends or reviews,just telling it as seen through his eyes.A few more could do with adopting his reviewing style!

[Frank]

Gee, we should not focus on other persons reviews but the work? But, thanks buddy :)

[Justin]

that was really great, it tells a great story in short form :) :) :) keep it up :)

[Lucid Dreamer]

That was a sweet and easy to read poem, I enjoyed it! Good write.