Light of Two Worlds
A Book by Mrs.Lovett
 This's the book I'm writing but I don't have a concret summary of it yet. I want to get some opinion first. Keep going? Fix it? Scrap the idea/Start over? Gimme some advice guys, thanks!
~Meg~  © 2013 Mrs.Lovett
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Cute, I really like it. I get a lot of feeling from this piece. I am always conflicted on how long a prologue should be. A page, a half a page? I want to read more of it. Now for the pick apart. I think that there was too much usage of the word "too". Maybe changing one or two of the words may read better. I would add a coma to "until she turned around," and use "beat" rather than "beating". Please send me a read request when you get more written.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Just a taste is all we need and yopu gave me that. Love the idea and now wonder were you will take me as you begin this novel. I look forward to reading more.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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I really enjoyed it. It grabbed my interest and made me want to read more. I really get a lot of emotion from this piece, like anxiety. It has personality too, style. The only thing I can think of that might improve it is at the end. Everything was so beautifully vivid, "like a cool cyclone" that was awesome. Repeating "wake up" with "woke up" fell flat for me.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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Keep going. It's good.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Cute, I really like it. I get a lot of feeling from this piece. I am always conflicted on how long a prologue should be. A page, a half a page? I want to read more of it. Now for the pick apart. I think that there was too much usage of the word "too". Maybe changing one or two of the words may read better. I would add a coma to "until she turned around," and use "beat" rather than "beating". Please send me a read request when you get more written.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on February 10, 2012
Last Updated on May 23, 2013
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Mrs.LovettFriendsville, MD
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I'm a down to earth girl who can sing,draw and write how I feel. I'm not affraid to write down what I think on paper and on Word. I love to express my self .. more..
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