Free me From me.

No Wait!

Stop!

Pleases!

Crying out loud and yet no one hears.
They all stand there and watch me with blank stairs.

I am scared and powerless,
I need some help anyone.

Yet no one comes to my rescue,
and i am still trapped.

Help!

Anyone!

Hello!?!

I listen for a response but nothing,
Just blank mindless zombies on the verge of a kill.

The faces blank like a plain printing paper,
and they seem to sway with mindlessness.

Oh how i wish someone was here to rescue me,
and that i will finally be free.

That i will be finally free from the worst person,
and that person is me.

Reviews

[((Teenage_Poet_Loser))]

couple of spelling errors in that i saw, but no biggy... and a couple of things that put me of with the pace.. the zombies thing is a little cliche? try something new and not yet used... but that is only in my opinion... love the start, put the right mood to the poem! great

[McKinleyA]

The way you conveyed the emotion by way of the story really made it for me. As said below, the ending was quite nice. Very good!

[Tai Ryens]

StarNinja already stated it, it's spelled "Stares." Other than that little flaw, it was quite an adequate poem. Star down there already stated half of what I thought while reading this.
As for a little comment, I love how you portray crying out for help to escape the insanity that lies within us. The structure was quite nicely put together, but the flow and the way the words could be said, they would make some writers stutter if they say it out loud.
Adequate poem, better than usual, nice write, if I do say so myself. Keep trying!

[Coyote Poetry]

Most of us cry for help and we must find our own way back to sanity. Great description and story made the poem fun to read. I like how you ended the poem. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[StarNinja]

It's spelled stares. Blank stares. Other than that, this one wasn't too bad. It felt like the word blank was a little overused. Blank blank blank. Anyways, good work.