Chapter 1

         The sound of a alarm clock sent Jessica flying out of bed. Her hair a total reck and her eyes were half shut as she stumbled out of  bed and in to the bathroom. Looking at her self in the mirror she let out os sigh of disgust. She looked like a train reck. Her eyes blood shot her hair looking like madusa's she was just not starting the day off in a good way and to make it worse it was the first day of school. After her horrid trip to the bathroom Jessica made her way down stairs to be greeted by her drool covered Boxer called Max. Looking around the room Jessica made her way to the kitchen. Each foot slowly lifted off the ground as she made her way to the bowls and cereal box. 

        Poring her self a bowl she sat down and begun to eat. The silence was interrupted when the screams echoed through the house. It was her sisters fighting over who knows what again. Jessica let out a sigh and finished to eat when Maddy came running down the hall holding a scarf. 

"GIVE THAT BACK YOU S**T!"  Kamrin shouted as she flew down the hall behind Maddy."I WARN YOU WHEN I CATCH YOU YOU ARE DEAD!"

Maddy let out a chuckle as she flew around the table waving the scarf high in the air. It was like a cat and mouse chase to Jessica no one ever wins. 

"Oh come on Kamrin it is just one small scarf you got tons of them." Maddy said as she danced around the room in a taunting way. "and besides Kamrin this is nothing but a old rag" 

Maddy took the scarf and a pair of scissors. She let out a smile and was about to cut the scarf when it was snatched out of her hand. Maddy turned around to see her mother standing over her scarf in hand. By the look on her face Jessica knew that she was not happy not at all. It was probably one of her boyfriends again. Jessica stood up and placed her bowl in the sink. She ran her fingers through her matted hair and made her way to her room to finish getting ready. The scolding of their mother carried all the way to Jessica's room. Ignoring the yelling of her mother Jessica got dressed and fixed her hair and makeup. Turning to the clock it read 7:00am. Jessica grabbed her hat and bag and made her way to school. 

"Love you mom see you later" She called as she scrambled out the door. Sprinting to the bus stop Jessica barely made it. With a sigh of relief she stepped on to the bus and  plopped down on the seat next to her best friend Becky. Becky turned to Jessica.

"Man you look horrible. Another 'great' morining" She said

"Yeah the best morning"

"What was it over this time?"

"A scarf"

"Really a scarf"

Jessica nodded her head.Becky let out a laugh.

"Wow Jessica your sisters are something else. i mean all that fighting over a silly scarf."

Looking out of the window ,not even hearing Becky talk, Jessica saw this boy walking down the road. His eyes were a gold color and his hair as black as coal. Jessica was not sure on who this boy way. She knew everyone here.'Maybe he is new here?' She thought. her thoughts were interrupted when Becky tapped her shoulder.

"Did you even here me?" She said as she looked at her friend.

Jessica turned around to her friend and rubbed her eyes. she was tired and did not want to be here. After all school is school boring.

"Sorry Becky i thought i saw someone with gold eyes and black hair walking next to the bus but i guess it was my imagination." She managed to say with a slight chuckle.

The two did not say a word the rest of the way to school. They were caught up in their own world well Jessica was. As the buss came to a stop Jessica stood up and made her way off the bus. Slowly walking down that side walk making her way in to the school someone ran in to her. Jessica did not expect that to happen. Before she knew it she was on the ground her books all over the side walk and a boy standing over her.

"Are you ok?" The boy asked as he offered a hand to help her up. Jessica looked at him and took his offer. Once on her feet she begun to pick up her stuff that was spread across the ground. 

"i am so sorry for running in to you"

Jessica looked at him "It is ok no harm done" She said as she stood up. The boy handed her her stuff and smiled. "So are you new here?" Jessica managed to ask him. "I asked because i saw you running to school today."

The boy looked at her and smiled "Yeah i just moved in three days ago." he said as he walked in to the school with Jessica. "My name is Lucillian and you are?" he asked.Jessica felt so stupid how rude could she be she never told him her name. "I am sorry my name is Jessica" She said as she came to her locker. 

Lucillian smiled at her and said "Well nice to meet you Jessica, i guess i need to get to class." As he walked away he called "I hope we get to meet each other again" He then disappeared down the hall in to a sea of people trying to get to class.

Closing her locker she made her way to her first class, Trig, Walking in to the class room she scanned the room for a open seat. Her eyes scanned each seat to come across one seat open in the back row. She walked down the isle and took a seat. Pulling out her math book she leaned back in her chair and waited for the day to start so it would end faster. 

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Jessica and Becky took their seat in the cafeteria next to some cheerleaders who just glared at them. Shaking her head Jessica managed to say "Take a picture next time it will last longer hunny" That mad the three girls snarl and get up and leave. Becky looked at Jessica and said "So who was that boy you were walking with earlier today.?" She asked

Jessica knew that Becky was just being noise once more but  she answered any way. "Well Becky i just meet him he is nice and all but i don't think he is my type." 

"What is his name?" Becky asked.

"His name is Lucillian"

"Lucillian hu? That is a unique name" 

Jessica sighed and pushed her peas across her tray. "Becky i am going to go to class i am not hungary" She said as she stood up.

"Ok Jessica see you later"

Jessica put her tray away and walked in to the hall. Slowly she strolled the hall trying to stall some time when she heard voices coming from the next hall. 

"I said i will get it done"

"But it is not done yet"

"What do you exspect out of me I am no f*****g Alpha"

"I know that Luke all i am saying is we need to get it done tonight."

"Fine i will"

"You better or..."

Their was a pause between their conversation.Before jessica knew it she was being held back. 

"Well i was right their was a ease dropper here.What should we do with her Luke?"

"Let her go"

"What?"

"i said let her go she is no threat to us."

"But she might have.."

"I AM STILL A HIGHER RANK THAN YOU AND I SAID LET HER GO NOW!!"

he shouted.

The other man let out a growl and pushed Jessica down. She looked at the two guys one had a mask on the other did not. Jessica was coughing from how hard he had her throat.Almost in tears Jessica could not get up. Her head was spinning and she passed out on the cold school floor.

When she woke up she found her self in the hospital. She looked around to find out it was the 14th of September. She was out for almost seven days. Rubbing her eyes she scanned the room to see someone standing in the dark corner all that showed was glowing golden eyes. She tilted her head and looked at the figure. "Hello who are you?" She said as she looked at the guy. It was a minute before their was a response. "I am glad he did not hurt you. Be careful next time on who's conversations you ease drop in on ok" Before she could respond he was gone. 

Jessica looked around the room in shock. Where could that boy have gone? She wondered. Letting out a relaxed sigh she leaned back and closed her eyes. Drifting off in to sleep Jessica could not help but to think of that boy she meet the other day before school. 

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Running down a dark path Jessica caught the glimpse of glowing yellow eyes in the near distance. She came to a halt and looked at the eyes. It was here eye level but she did not understand why or what it is. Jessica looked at the sky to see a full moon shinning bright in the sky. How beautiful she thought totally forgetting the pair of glowing eyes that were watching her. Jessica shook her head and turned back down to the ground. Looking around she realized she was in the woods. 

Not just any woods but Kyara woods. These woods are said to be pitch dark in the night time, well almost. The sound of a twig snapping behind her sent her turning around with such speed that it seemed to surprise her. 

"I see you survived" The dark figure said.

Jessica was confused Survived what and what did this guy mean. The figure shook its head.

"i see i will need to explain this to you." He sighed and walked closer. Jessica looked at the guy he was a wolf. A wolf. 

"Oh i see now i am dreaming" Jessica said. "This is nothing but a dream because Wolves can not talk."

The wolf chuckled "Well you got one thing right wolfs can not talk, but the thing is i am not a wolf." he said walking closer to her. "I am what you call a lycanthrope" He said as he walked closer to Jessica. 

Jessica stared at him "So you are telling me that you are a werewolf?" She said

The wolf nodded "Exactly i am the one who scratched you and yo..."

Jessica cut him off. "No i can't be like you you must get bit to change.. don't you?"

The wolf shrugged "Not exactly. See you can get scratched but if the nails dig in to your skin and stay their for more than four minutes you can be prone to change but it usually never happens. In your case it did happen and i am surprised you even survived the change."

Jessica did not know what to do she was in a complete shock. "So i am a lycanthrope too."

The other guy nodded "Yes" He paused "And now since you survived the turn you must learn your role in the pack."

Jessica soon found her self surrounded by others. They all walked up to her and the sounds of chatter filled the air. 

"She will not survive the test."

"But she survived the change"

"So that means nothing"

"Yeah the last one survived the change but not the test"

"Oh she will survive i know it"

"What ever Lucillian"

"I see he is falling for her all ready"

"how sad" 

Jessica was unsure what was happening.She looked at all the others then at the first wolf who was talking to her before.

"Now We must introduce our selves. It is only polite. My name is Kur and you are?" 

Jessica took in a deep breath "Jessica, Jessica is my name"

Kur nodded "Ok i guess that will do for now. But if you survive you get a new name."

"Kur just get going"

"Yeah we have places top be"

Kur swayed his tail and every one shut up. he then turned to Jessica "See i am what we call the Alpha and if you survive this you become a Omega got it" 

Jessica nodded

"Good now Get ready" he yelled and leaped at her. his teeth bared and yellow eyes glowing in the night. Claws ready to tare her into peaces.Jessica spun out of the way just in time as Kur flew past her. 

"not bad but not good enough" He snarled and took off in to the trees. Jessica scanned the area with her eyes trying to see her. She then realized she was a wolf too. Slowly she stopped moving. head low and ears up in alert. Just as Kur leaped out of the tree Jessica scurried out of the way. Kur came to the ground with a soft thud. Jessica saw that he had no idea where she went and she made her move. Leaping in to the air she brought her self on top of the wolf.

Jessica took her claws and dug in to his back. Kur let out a growl and spun his head back to catch Jessica by the shoulder and pull her off him. Pinning her down Kur had the upper hand now. He took his claws and clawed at her underbelly. Jessica yelped in pain. She took her hind legs and dug her claws in to his belly. Kur leaped off and glared at her. He then bowed down and smiled slightly. 

"Well i see you got the skill needed to join and you can join our pack." 

Kur paused. "Your new name will be decided next full moon but their is a choice you need to have picked before then"

Jessica looked at him "What is that choice?"

Kur begun to walk away "Join us and leave your life behind tell no one, Join us and tell your family but risk them getting killed, Or die" he then disappeared in to the woods.

Jessica stood their alone in the unfamiliar woods. "Kur...KUR...." But no answer. Jessica was alone and to make it worse she either had to join and leave her family or don't join and die. Their was no middle ground and Jessica knew that. Sitting down in the woods she let out a cry. She had no idea what to do. Either way she would loose everything.

Author's Note

sorry for all the random bolding and slants but i can't get them to turn off so bare with me please and enjoy the chapter.

Reviews

[JoeMcDonald]

One thing I noticed right away is that you started with an alarm clock. As a general rule, that should not be done. As with all rules there are exceptions, but I don't believe this is one of them. There is usually a better opening line for a story than with the sound of an alarm or the waking of a dream.

[Ecnelis]

I like the premise of this story a lot! I am a big wolf person! You have an interesting character! Over all it is a decent chapter and the beginning to what seems to be a pretty interesting story!

On a critical note, this chapter suffers from repetition issues (using the same words, mostly nouns, to often in a short period of time) and some other less noticeable grammar issues (for some reason a lot of your proper 'I's come out lowercase).

It also suffers from a very... choppy way of transitions and development. You bring the reader to a new place, give them minimal description or background and in a few paragraphs, whisk us off to a new location/event. This makes it terribly confusing and gives the chapter a very rushed feeling. It feels like you crammed to much into one short chapter. Your idea is great and you evidently have some great characters but sometimes you need to slow down and let the readers get to know the characters and the life they live before plunging straight into the main plot.

Any way! I'm very excited to read more! Please tell me if you'd like less critical or more critical reviews! I know some people post on here mostly for plot/content/story comments and not style or grammar!

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[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong opening chapter. I like how you described the joining of the pack. The world of the animals is much different then the human world. I like the ending. A big decision leaving a opening for the next chapter. A excellent chapter.
Coyote

[BrynnaW.]

There are some grammar mistakes but this is an excellent beginning. I really want to read on... Personally, I just hope the chapters aren't as long because it just seems like a long sitting at the computer. But that doesnt really matter as long as I like it! :) I really enjoyed it and now I will read on. Keep writing!

[Christine McNead]

Very good story! I was really interested and I think you've got an idea that can be great. May want to go over the grammar mistakes, but I'm sure that wasn't what you were focusing on because the rest of the story is fabulous, and I think the beginning was realistic and also relatable, because who doesn't have crazy families? Keep up the good work!

[TheElfPrincess]

A few mistakes with grammar, but for the rest a very interesting opening. Reading the first lines made me feel the stress of being late, so well done. A good chapter, write on!

[McKinleyA]

Very nice first chapter! It really sets up the scene, introduces you to who you're going to be with the rest of the story, which is exactly what you want in the first chapter!
And, "Take a picture next time it will last longer hunny" made me laugh. xP

[Hunter C. Brown]

liked the chapter very much, very original in my opinion keep on writing!!!!!!!!!!! ;P