Would you?

Just based on a random thought I keep thinkign over and over x

If I did, If I died,

If I failed, but still I tried,

Would you be there for me?

Not as a friend, but a little more,

Not judging but still there for,

The broken girl,

Lost in this world.

Would you be there?

With the wires and machines,

hooked up to keep me,

Preserve me, but ever so secretly,

Kill me.

would you save me?

Run away from this s**t with me.

Hide together in the middle of it,

Untill the world ends.

And on that day my dear,

I'll gaze into your eyes, 

And keep my promise,

You first, then me.

Author's Note

Please giive me hints and tips so I cane become better :) x

Reviews

[BlueberryKisses]

This is really good :) great job! I love the last four lines, great way to end the poem, they are awesome.

[Ravyne Hawke]

As for this piece, Blessed.. I think you nailed it. I cannot think of anything constructive to say to make it better as I think it is perfect just the way it is. You write very well and concise. This is an excellent poem.