Gravity

"Gravity"

I wake up in the morning nearly ten feet tall, refreshed from the last day’s bitter fall.

I tell myself today will be better like draping my body in a warm wool sweater.

By time day breaks in the light doesn't even reach my skin; now I'm feeling the effects of gravity, pulling down on me.

My spine now hunches so that I may lower to the size of 9 feet tall, but I refused to fall; the day is yet to collect its ransom hovering over my soul like the dark presence of a phantom.

Now noon my inevitable downfall is coming soon, for I am now 6 foot 10 and losing hope that I may win.

The darkness is creeping in over my eyes, clouding my thoughts like emotional blood clots.

I’m now 4 foot 5, collecting dust behind my eyes, yet you're all so deaf you cannot hear my cries.

It is now 2:05 and my height has been minimized to its near collapse size of 3 foot 8, this is my last chance to avoid relapse, so I do not hesitate; I reach for the stars just beyond my grasp as I fall into the void I created to be destroyed.

I will rise again tomorrow to face the dark and sorrow, but as for today I have worn out my stay; I will see you again on the morrow.

Author's Note

Any advice or criticism is welcome.

Reviews

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An interesting piece of writing.

I enjoyed the theme, rising strong and full of optimism in the morning only to be downtrodden again by life at dusk.

The only criticism i have is the lay out of the poem; perhaps a better structure when you type it will highlight your rhyme and give the piece a better flow.

Otherwise, a nicely themed piece of work.

[Sad Poet]

Thanks for reviewing! :D

[AnayaJ.]

I love the depth you managed to bring in. Both of your poems are amazing and you've really succeeded in making them deep and meaningful. Nice work!

-AJB :)

[Sad Poet]

Thank ya:D