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For DJ
Written January 9, 2014
Even though you're hours upon
hours away...
You make me feel like a
whirlpool being fueled by the
rain...
Sucking up every word and
hmmm that you breathe...
Constantly drowning all of the
doubts that tread in my seas...
That float above the roaring of
emotions within....
The eye of my heart where
there's love that you've
given....
There's strength in my pull and
weakness in my control...
The stories of sailors that would
have been left untold...
But along with the words and
the feelings that swam...
I sucked it all in and unwillingly
slammed...
Your thoughts and
emotions into the ships that to
the left, failed to hurl...
So the constant pulling of my
whirls, swirls, and watery
curls...
Brought you in faster... But
there's none of your laughter...
You're still being pulled in
deeper hoping for no disaster...
Coming into a whirlpool in the
middle of the sea..
Seeing it's a place most
wouldn't actually want to be...
You wait and try to wield the
wheel willingly to the right...
Knowing that you're sailing in
with the sturdiness of a
knight...
But you're still trying to see
what exactly you're doing...
While feeding my pool with
your many anxious
uncertainties...
Along with your secrets and
desires as well as new
beginnings....
No longer catching fish but
these heavily unapproachable
feelings...
All the while..
Not even knowing...
Whether the outcome is bound
to be life or death...
Yet you're still holding on while
dodging loose regrets...
Trying to stay on your deck in
my being...
The winds still pushing yet
you're not even fleeing....
I want the winds to ease and
the rain to cease....
The clouds to part and to
restore calming in my seas...
With you in your ship as safe as
can be...
Catching as much fish as you
could possibly...
Where the sun's warmth is
barely an itchin'...
and the on your skin the sea
breeze is kissin'...
With a smile on your face and
no tears from your eyes...
As my waves repay you with a
push towards the skies...
Don't be afraid when the waves
are still...
That doesn't mean there's no
life underneath to be called
real...
It's just that the wind is
working up some courage...
To fly above the water that
needs to be encouraged...
To keep your ship floating with
you singing your song...
Giving me the honor to help
move you along...
To wherever it is that you want
to go...
In my seas you may not stay...
Just be sure to leave the boat...
Because I can never... At
anytime... get up and walk
away...
For I am the lingering ocean..
therefore I'll continue to sway...
Even if you leave your ship and
walk amongst the land...
You can always get back in the
boat that you left in the sand...
Sunset or sunrise...
I'll watch for you sailing
towards the unreachable
skies...
With my glistening waves that
WILL rise.. again...
I'll be sure to sail you all the
way to your destination...
I love it, the poem but it is just a tad bit too long. I love the way you set up the picture and the music, how do you do that:) cause I think its awesome!! Great set up with everything!!!
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Appreciate the feedback. When you're posting a new poem... there's that part that says "Author's Not.. read moreAppreciate the feedback. When you're posting a new poem... there's that part that says "Author's Note" at the bottom of the page. That's where you paste the embed code of the video/file you want to play. On Youtube just find a video you want to be played and where it says "Share" There's a word next to it that says "Embed" Copy that code and paste it in the Author's Note box. After that you need to find the url in the embed code and at the end of it type -----> ?&autoplay=1 ?&autoplay=1 after the url which is
Make sure you have the entire embed code and the only thing different is ?&autoplay=1 placed at the end of the url before the quotation mark.
After saving your poem and going on it's link the music should autoplay.
Hope that helps. Good luck! and Thank you for reviewing.
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oopsie... they wouldn't show the embed code /.
This link should help support.google.co.. read moreoopsie... they wouldn't show the embed code /.
This link should help support.google.com/youtube/answer/171780?hl=en
Just don't forget to plug in the autoplay code ? & autoplay = 1 (with no spaces)
This poem was a little long winded, I believe you could have achieved a good poem in slightly fewer lines.
That's just my opinion though. The imagery was really well done.
The metaphor through out the poem almost writes itself.
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10 Years Ago
Much appreciated and will keep that in mind... thank you.