Lost In Paradise

A brief poem that tries to explain how loneliness can strike anyone anywhere, no matter where they are or what they do or do not have.

Below me, there is nothing,

Above me: everything.

A piece of heaven just out of my reach,

Out of sight,

Out of mind,

I'm out of my depth.

Heavenly Father, Earthly Mother,

Can only point and whisper,

They cannot help,

They do not know.

So I am left,

Standing at the gates of heaven,

Crying all alone.

Reviews

[Sally Hope]

This is probably the only poem I've come across in a long, long while, that I read and thought: Wow. So I read it again. And I kind of read it, over and over again, before I remembered there's a "My Library" option on this site. This is the kind of piece that never gets old no matter how many times you read it, for the message it gives is timeless, atleast to me. I'm so glad you started writing again, and that you decided to share this with us.

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you so much it means a lot especially as I wrote it years ago. Thank you for taking the time to read it friend :)

[Reshma]

Wow...
I love it :)
I love every thing in this one . This makes you think, and also makes you re-think many things that has happened in your life .
I really love it and of course tops my favourite list :)
Thanks a lot for writing and sharing . Impatiently looking forward for new works :)
Reshma

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you for your continued reading and support, it inspires me to write more! X

[kyam]

Very meaningful, very well written. The difference between the two realities, very well put together. I'm impressed. Wonderful expressions........Kyam

[BlaqkShadow]

That means a lot thank you so much sweetie :) X Hope you are ok x

[nk36n37e]

I love it, I love it, I love it. This is real poetry. When you can create something that connects, like a piece to a puzzle you never knew you were missing, you know you've created art. That poem alone is enough to make me want to read the rest of work, unlike 90%+ of the work on this site. Keep it up!
-Noah

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you so much, you have been so kind to me!

[Strawberry Evil]

Woah that's powerful. The words you have chosen are really good, the poem pulls me in, filling me with different emotions, such as fear and despair. Still I sense a small, tiny hope behind it. I can also relate to the message on this poem well, I think most people can, but still it feels really personal. Very well written, good job!

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you so much for your kind words it took me a long time to return to writing but people like you make me want to continue!

[RandomAuthorOverHere]

This is an intriguing poem. You could even expand it if you want and talk about the "above". Maybe talk about stars, universe, cosmo, ect. Up to you

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you hun, perhaps I will rewrite and expand it :) I've been trying to write more so there's no reason I can't include re-writing. Thank you for the review :D

[Emma]

Yes I can relate to this one all too well. But Its funny these days I don't feel alone. I feel full. Perhaps its all a matter of perception. Thank you for sharing.

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you so much for your review :D I'm glad you don't feel alone anymore.