Wasting Away

May trigger emotions for some people. It did for me.

Imagine your mental state as a projection of yourself.

Do you think you're wasting away?

Can you see the anguished scars of memories,

painted across your body like a mural of twisted decisions?

Does it make you sick to see the pain you've felt?

That which you have kept buried in the crypt of self deprecation

you call your heart?

I want you to step forward, 

cross the line you once drew.

The line you swore to always uphold until the day of your sweet death.

Embrace yourself.

I want you to hold yourself the way that you wish you were being held when you felt that pain.

You may feel alone sometimes,

but always know that failing support from anyone else.

The greatest support can be yourself.

Reviews

[Bee C.]

This is incredibly strong and I can tell that it's heartfelt and passionate. I won't lie - I really needed this. For the only person who has stuck around with you through all of it is yourself. You are the person who dragged your body out of bed, who fed you when you didn't want to eat, who held you when you were crying. Truly, truly beautiful message.
One thing, and one thing only. You may want to look again at the punctuation in the final stanza, as the sentence feels incomplete. Perhaps replace the period with a comma, and make "failing support from anyone else" a separate clause. Other than that, fantastic job!

[The Black Warrior]

Nicely done and well said BlankCypher!

[Gregory Stires]

This poem is very good. I love how it just pulls me into it within its depths. Also I like how this poem is just pure honesty since you don't sugar coat it which in my opinion when a person doesn't sugar coat things it means that they have the respect for you to tell you the honest yet painful truth. And like how at the end it give people who feel this way that even if they don't have anyone to support them, they have themselves to support them.

[SLOVA]

A gripping poem with severe depth. It clutches the reader immediately due to it's lack of beating around the bush. It's to the point and concise and personal from an impersonal standpoint. Good work.

SLOVA

[Azure]

soo deep, filled with meaning and emotions a very strong and great piece
Thanks for sharing

[Briana O'Connor]

Love the depth of the questions you pose. It really gets the wheels turning.

[Emily]

Love the meaning!
Keep it up!

[your mom]

This story is to the point,and describes exactly how humans feel. We truly are our own greatest support. Only we know deep down inside exactly the feelings that we have gone through in our journey through this life.
Sharon Krager

[Eleanor]

Wow! This is packed with emotions. I could feel and understand the pain in this.
Deep and has a strong meaning. I love the ending. Sometimes all we ever need is to love ourself. We fail but its a part of life. Sometimes we feel alone but we should realize there is so much out there waiting for us and that we are not alone. "The world is not a wish granting factory" Sometimes bad things happen, but thats life.
Great job!

[xhannyx]

This is such a beautiful poem and I am telling you it made me bawl my eyes out. I cried so much and I felt the pain you were talking about! This has now got to be one of my 10 favorite poems!!

[BlankCypher]

Awh thank you :D I'm sorry that it made you cry though :o
If you need to talk to anyone you can always talk to me :D
Awh yay c:

[xhannyx]

Aww thank you that really means a lot. This poem just hit a sensitive spot in my heart!

[BlankCypher]

Awh well I'm glad you could relate to it so well! :D

[xhannyx]

Yes I did(: thank you for this poem!

[BlankCypher]

No problem at all :D