Lookin' Into Your Eyes

I, want to know, what you're thinking inside
I can't help, but to look into your eyes and see
Beautiful, lovely daisies everywhere
Beautiful, a love beyond compare
You are so beautiful inside

 

 

I see you, as you walk around town
Bringin' sunshine into the gray bitterness as you pass
A love, beyond light, years ahead of your time

 

Because you're beautiful,
A soul beyond compare,
Beautiful
You are so beautiful inside

 

I know, sorrow, but you’re a silver line in the sky
Waiting to bring the world, to a glorious high
They don't know, from where you came, but where you go just the same

 

Because you're beautiful,
A light beyond come
Beautiful
You are so beautiful inside

 

You bring your light, and they flock to watch you fly
Over the slings and arrows, and all those mean little things
It’s so sad, that life has to try to bring you down
But you'll never fall, you're much greater then them all
All the power is in your unclaimed crown
‘Cause you’re, you are the Queen of the world

 

You fight fires with your smile
You slip the pain away for awhile
You give the pleasure of easing the pain
You make the sun shine again
And this is all when I look into your eyes
 

Author's Note

I wrote this poem years ago when I was in college. It was inspired by this girl who had the most beautiful blue eyes, I swear they looked liked they shimmered and shined. I had this tune stuck in my head, kind of a slowed down version of Velocity Girl's "Go Coastal," but as a male/female duo song with more so a female lead. I'm not sure if I'm done with this one, so any feedback is greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[L.G. Knight]

I liked the concept, it seem to jump and jitter a little when it came to rythym though. The words were great but if its a song the rhymes are a little off. It needs some tweaking to be sure but it is a wonderful peice and with the progress you have made since writing this that tweaking should be a fairly easy task for you. All in all though it was really a wonderful pice and if it got the tweaking it needs and deserves it would cross the bar into a fabulous piece.

[Amanda]

a really nice write, Blake. it is filled with passion and inspiration for a beautiful person.

thanks for sharing this with me.

Always,

Amandq

[Carole]

Sounds like love to me. All of the signs were there when you wrote this. At the very least, a definite infatuation...

I can't help, but to look into your eyes and see
Beautiful, lovely daisies everywhere
Beautiful, a love beyond compare
You are so beautiful inside

This is absolutely beautiful, Blake. A definite inspiration. Blessings, Carole