no slave you be

no slave you be except to thee
and the things of which that made you

though not by divine will brought
but crashing bashing particles
that when caught

fleeing the dying stars
from which they're shot

in their crissing crossing
make a thing with thought

that can miraculously know the difference
between that it is

as opposed to it is not

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

The flow and rhyme scheme is ingenious...I need to remind myself of these sentiments more often...great piece Blake.

[Ashira Macy]

We are our own worst enemies. Really well said my friend.

[Sometimes Blood]

I loved this piece. It is very cleverly written and thought-provoking.

[Wandering Minstrel]

I like the content and the flow of this piece. It is interesting and holds a readers attention.

[Vito]

This is so full of emotion and vivid language.

[Matching Socks]

Very very cool piece with rich meaning...
I am a slave to my own self... It's true.

[Patrick]

wow! This is very deep and provocative. Another great write

[Lauriegirl]

This radiates with deep emotion and feeling. You have described your feelings so beautifully. The flow is wonderful as well. Thank you for sharing this

[Susan Beth Horvath]

Very nicely done. I enjoyed the artfulness of this post.