Forever?

Poem I wrote after the person I breathe and live for, who I was supposed to be with for the rest of my life, who promised me her love, who I completely changed my life for........left me.

I'm shaking and twitching
please take it back
Is this really happening
please take it back

You said I was the best
please think it over
You'll realize what you left
please think it over

My self esteem now is so low
A messed up joke, please say so
I'm broken down under weight
I cannot breathe or concentrate
It's all wrong and not so good
I wish you really understood
You took my heart and made it yours
Tore it open, now blood pours
Was I trying way too hard
Our times we've spent, you'll just discard
Oh your god now please help me
I'm down, I've fallen on my knees
If it's drugs you'd rather stay
I'm sorry I don't live that way...

Reviews

[Magdelena]

Wow. Powerful piece here.. Love is supposed to make you feel like you can achieve anything. Share things together.. Choices made are ones we live with forever.. Your wording was fab on this.. Felt your vulnerability in all, the imagery blew me away.

Mags xx

[ZoeyNevermore]

omg... sorry.. dose she not see the pure endless love and devotion you have for her... your great man i see this in the short time i have know you... i see the greatness the pure and true artist in you... the person you write about so has missed that from the sound of it...

[Poetic Beauty]

Wow this is a sad poem full of emotions.

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that was a white knuckle ride...emotionally explosive stuff..felt the vulnerability in the words..most of us have been here..love doesn't make you feel this way..

[Aline S. Iniestra]

Wow, how sad and painful!!! I loved this. It is just so honest and, i dare say (hope it doesn't sound bad), one could touch and see the pieces of the heart....
Hope all is good soon!! =)

[Ice QueenJen]

what a great way to describe how it feels when your heart is broken. You should put this to music Blake!

[Fran Marie]

very nicely penned and well expressed!

[Jonathan De Elvira]

:)

[Frantzuu]

Great poem, very emotional, you put heart and soul into this piece and it shows. I hope you learned something from that experience. My advise would be to never make someone your everything because when that person leaves you'll have nothing but an empty heart. It's okay to love but you have to remember we are humans and we will hurt others we care about. The best way to ease the pain is to keep in mind that it is possible that person you love so much might one day leave you.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This is a really sad poem. I really think it can explain what I'm feeling like right now at the moment. I really loved this poem though. I liked the words that you used within it. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

Very nice love it