Blue eyed Jaybird

Once upon a time I let the most important person slip through my fingers, and only then did I realize their worth.

 

I kept him caged,

 He was all mine,

 I let him go,

 I made him fly,

 He didn’t want to leave,

 I wanted him to stay,

 But I knew he had to go,

 So he went anyway…

 

Now there’s no trace,

Just a bitter sweet taste,

Someone else loves him,

And he loves the same,

He holds her close

Safe and sound

I feel so lost without him around.

 

I hope she takes care of him,

Loves him his whole life,

Why can’t he still be mine.

 

Blue Eyed Jay Bird do you hear me,

I still love you but you deserve to be free,

I wish my lips were all that you kissed,

I wish I was still the one that you missed,

Without your touch I feel so alone,

I cannot make it on my own.

 

Maybe soon everything will clear,

I’ll be able to breath without you near,

Although you always took my breath away…

I miss those days when I would hear you say,

You would always love me and never go away.

 

You deserve so much,

I gave you so little,

You wanted all of me,

I wanted to fiddle,

I pushed you away,

Far enough that you left,

Don’t pretend that she’s me,

Love her for her,

Don’t love her for me.

 

I miss the way you played with my hair,

I miss your Blue eyed stare,

I wear your jacket to remember your smell,

And how you would always catch me if ever I fell,

I was a fool to let you go,

What we could have been I will never know,

I gave you up,

I deserve these tears,

I’ve lost you forever,

My deepest fears.

 

I covered your cage,

So I don’t have to see,

A constant reminder,

That you aren’t with me.

 

I close my eyes,

I see your face,

I hear your voice,

I refuse to erase,

The memories we shared,

At our own pace.

 

Now you’ll come back,

I’m with someone new,

I love him a lot,

But he isn’t you,

I stay with him,

Happily living my lie,

I’ve hurt you enough,

Please don’t cry,

You can’t go on pretending your still mine.

 

Don’t look at me,

Don’t look in my eyes,

You’ll find the truth,

Inside my lies.

 

I want you,

But I’m with him,

I’m stuck drowning you both,

In my own sin.

 

Reviews

[Nickolas]

This was great! I loved how the lines were crossed out, I don't know how to explain it but the crossed out lines just added something. And the blue eyed jay bird, how it was incorporated into the poem with blue eyed part was pretty good too! You should put this into one of the contests, you're bound to place!

[BlaiR]

Thank you! I felt the lines helped me get the point across that I was trying to say things that were hard enough to say, and I wasn't sure if I wanted to say them in the first place. I think it just added to it. Thank you for your review!

[Decere Tiozon]

Beautifully done Heartbreaking and very many people could relate. The rhymes helped with its artistic beat. Throughout reading it, I felt the raw emotion behind every word. Thumbs up!

[Sami Khalil]

Sad , heartfelt, wonderful...:)

[Leona Cieri]

Oh wow, this is just beautifully melancholy; I really loved reading this piece; it nearly had me in tears! Nothing too fancy, just simply touching and gripping. The rhymes were quite good and added to the piece without being too singsongy and the whole concept is very poignant. You don't need the cross out lines though I understand what you meant by them, the meaning is clear without them.
Just really, really, wonderful piece, you brought out the emotion and meaning well. Thanks for sharing and continue on writing~

[BlaiR]

Thank you for your feedback!!! Very sweet. I love to hear what people think about this piece in particular, it's one of my best.

[Tina]

I hope I never feel this pain inside. You express it so well, I want to forget all the guys I have fallen for!
Make more please.

-TNT

[Tim Piotrowicz]

FANTASTIC! The ending gave me shivers, and that is always a great reaction from sad poetry!

i liked this section a lot:

You deserve so much,
I gave you so little,
You wanted all of me,
I wanted to fiddle,
I pushed you away,
Far enough that you left,
Don’t pretend that she’s me,
Love her for her,
Don’t love her for me.

Besides all being well rhymed, and well written, it carries your message clear, though sometimes the flow of my reading got slowed by the scratch lines. Maybe try a different font and no lines? The poem is so full of emotion, it almost seeps out of my computer screen. Well done.

[BlaiR]

Thank you! I think I'll for sure pass on the strike through in the future...you're right, very difficult to read :)