Beautiful

There's no words in websters dictionary that can describe this feeling I get when you come around, It's like I get all hot and my mouth get's dry and in the room everything disappears even the sound, when I get the courage I will ask you what mission did God send such a beautiful angel such as yourself here to this earth to do, and how long will you be here and can we at least go for a walk or something after your mission is through, maybe a picnic under a full moon with the stars as our entertainment and the crickets our symphony of music to talk about life, and forgive me if that sounds a little lame but I just thought that maybe that would be nice, by the way my name is Tony and this is beyond a pleasure to be in your presence and to shake your hand, so tell me are you single and if your not then you truley have a blessed man, maybe you will keep me in mind and some day when your not to busy you can give me a call, and we can meet for a chocolate shake on the river front at the mall, till then I will look forward to our next meet and long to hear your pretty voice, and pray if it's God's will that I will be the one that you will make your final choice.
Tony Po'
Ghetto Poetry

Reviews

[AlexB10]

Well done! I little itchy thing I think should be corrected is the word TO. I think you mean TOO. Great style, lots of gentleman talk w/out being boring. Short, effective, and beautifully written; just the way I liket it.

[Walkingblind]

This is raw! I like your style of writing, you used one of my favorite words
as your title so I had to come see what this was about. I wasn't dissapointed this
is so nice, I can see you keeping all the nervousnes down as you talk to her.

I will ask you what mission did God send such a beautiful angel such as yourself here to this earth to do, and how long will you be here and can we at least go for a walk or something after your mission is through

This is so nice really gorgeous, it has been used so many times before but you make it
sound so new and refreshing as a woman I'd love to be told this very beautiful!

[Lyrical Love]

maybe a picnic under a full moon with the stars as our entertainment and the crickets our symphony of music to talk about life, and forgive me if that sounds a little lame but I just thought that maybe that would be nice,
That sounds so romantic!
~ Nice write!

[Frank F. Atanacio]

I actually enjoy your style of poetry--it comes clean crisp and right to the point and you don't hide it behind old fashion styles. Fantastic piece :)