Companions

I travel with that known as Death, Reaper of Souls,

I lead him to his helpless victims, no remorse in me.

The echoes of the dying cause me no harm whatsoever,

For I bear witness to both the Living and  Dying alike,

Having no fear of what I must do in my allotted time.

The clock never stops, it keeps on going, for eternity.

I am Death's immortal companion, speaking when He

requires me to fulfill my purposeful requirement.

For He is my master and would dare not disobey him,

Even if I were able to...

All must face the scythe of my Master, must they not?

Author's Note

A somewhat short poem. Just a concept I thought of when contemplating how Death would know when to reap with his scythe.

Reviews

[Bodine]

That's good!
- A good number of lines (seemingly) contain redundancies, especially lines 3 and 8.
- I'm unclear as to what "alloted time" means, given that the narrator claims he's Death's immortal companion. Is it that he's allowed only a certain amount of time to find each helpless victim?

[Lovecraft]

The alotted time is the time he has to find the person to whom Death will reap. If he fails, that persons soul will not be reaped.

[Bodine]

You might revise it to make that clearer.

[Mary]

So even the reaper has a guide! Nice to know, hehe. This fine poem begs for another from this most interesting companion. I wonder, is he slave or apprentice, how does he choose for the reaper? can deals be made?

[Lovecraft]

Thanks. I think of the narrator as both slave and apprentice. Also the Reaper in this poem is one among countless other Reapers, though the Guide/Narrator may not be aware of this. :)

[Tony Jordan]

I'll echo Mr McFadyen's sentiment and say I love the thoughts of a Death's equivalent to 'Santa's little helper' as the premise of this one Lc.
Would the 'assistant' be of the undead then? Just a weird query...
Well done my friend
:))

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Love the concept of Death having a Sméagol like creature sniffing out those marked for demise. Well told in a mystical fashion.

I might suggest
'He requires me to fulfill my purposeful Duty.' to avoid requires requirement?
and an 'I' missing?
'For He is my master and I would dare not disobey him
'

[Lovecraft]

Thanks for the constructive criticism. I was somewhat drunk when I composed it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Cheers!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your pieces are always dark, Lovecraft as is this one too. You seem to have studied death and how it's "mind" works on a greater degree ;)

I like the description and imagination here (although it seems twisted to like it) but it is inevitable.

Without death, we wouldn't have appreciated life..

Interesting read :)

[Lovecraft]

I was drunk, i'll change that. ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah okay 😉😛

[Lovecraft]

Just edited that part. This site is glitched right now

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Is it? Not here though..
I edited my review too, cheers 😊

[Lovecraft]

I would type in two words then I would have to re-click where I left off, type a few letters, rinse and repeat. It's fine now though. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh that happened with me too earlier. I thought it was me being clumsy lol 😛

[Lovecraft]

I told you the site was being dumb. You big dummy!
;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh haha! Yeah the site has taken it's toll on me too lol 😂

[AYVID N]

The echoes of the dying cause me no harm whatsoever,
For I bear witness to both the Living and Dying alike,

Your thoughts on a most inevitable event for every mortal are very deep. I like the indifferent tone of Death here in sharp contrast to the fear and emotion it evokes in all mankind. Indeed, we are so insignificant in the greater scheme of things. Much appreciated, Lovecraft!

[Lovecraft]

Thank you, Divya. The indifference to death is what I was aiming for. Despite the rational fear of death, it truly is an inevitable and insurmountable source within our lives.

[AYVID N]

Agreed. Most of our life, actions and decision are planned with Death in mind...I wonder how different things would be, had there been a different Universal Order...It was a pleasure reading this unique piece. You are welcome Lovecraft.