She Cries

She set there, her heart pounding with fear,
As these tears force their way out, because pain and sorrow is what life is all about.
A kindred spirit has turned to mute, when loneliness is heard in a tune of a beautiful flute.
She finds comfort in a song, that makes everything not seem so wrong.
But her pain grows, and all the emotions of a broken melody flows.
Belief in her self becomes a dream, when all is gone and nothing is what it seems.
So she cries in the middle of night, because she hasn't the will to continue to fight.
She rocks back and forth when her body shakes, as all her composure slips and breaks.
Her mind is empty except the memories of a scarred life, scars cut so deep, that there's nothing left to keep.
She breaks down in a fit of sobs, eyes closed as her chest becomes tight.
Unsure of her existence, questioning what is wrong, what is right.
So she continues to cry because in her world, doves don't fly.
She is an outcast in a world she's bound to, it is a heartbeat that can never be found.
Her wings clipped as she falls, and she knows not even heaven will call, when all is said and done.

Author's Note

I'm sure there are mistakes...but I wrote this cuz it was exactly how I was feeling...so I'm sorry if there are any.

Reviews

[Emily]

I love that first line!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[dan]

Amberlynn, The way you present this piece is almost prosaic in its structure. The way you rhyme internally within each line is a very effective way to call attention to the emotions contained within. When a line makes a stark and vivid statement I like to call "impact lines," it can hit like a lightning bolt. One such line is, "She rocks back and forth when her body shakes, as all her composure slips and breaks." That line practically jumped out of my computer monitor into my lap and sat there, its body shaking. THAT is what writing poetry can do...your message in this write is so vividly clear, and I congratulate you for it. Very nice writing! take care...dan

[Amberlynn Kaye]

Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind review. I can't write if I'm calm like that. Only when I'm in that state can I actually express it right or clearly. But Thank you for taking the time to read it and I'm glad you enjoyed it! Please take care my friend!

[dan]

No need to thank me, this poem deserves every compliment it receives. take care...dan