You Let Me Down

Your in my head.
So hard because of where it lead,
A love thought to be real,
Then proved that was not what you feel.

You let me down hard and fast.
And I thought we would have last.
You said, "We should just be friends.
No more being together, no more future plans.

I could hear my voice crack.
It felt sharp like a thumb tack.
My world, my life all crumbled.
As my heart tumbled.

I thought you said forever?
Was it that you meant never?
As you hung up the phone,
I felt abandoned. Alone.
And I fell to my knees in tears.

That had awoken my eyes. My fears.
And its been awhile and we don't talk.
Cause each word is like a straight line of chalk.
And I had given up....

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Heartbreak. So painful!
Felt the depth and emotion in this piece.
Sure allot of people can relate to the feelings in this piece.
Great little write :)

[Amberlynn Kaye]

Thank you so much! I appreciate it!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

anytime :)

[dan]

Amberlynn, The universality of the let-down is imprinted on us all in one way or another. You have taken that common feeling/emotion and put words to it like a songwriter puts lyrics to music. So much vivid imagery that lingers in this reader's mind after the poem ends..."each word is like a straight line of chalk" is so wonderfully descriptively offbeat it rings like a bell in a quite night. Very nice job! take care...dan (my pen name is riki....I wish I could change my profile to my real name but don't know how.)

[Amberlynn Kaye]

Thanks! I write when I'm feeling in that kind of emotion an its like the negativity of words that I think get wrote down on paper and its easier to express how I am feeling at that moment.