Bloody Mary

She’s breaking,

And she cannot be fixed.

She’s missing,

However, she won’t be missed.

She still shakes

Because of her fears.

She’s crying over

The wasted tears.

She says, “You’re right,

I have too many scars.”

In her short life

She’s been very far.

She says, “I know,

I wish I could be thin.”

She fights another battle

And sometimes, she doesn’t win.

She feels so flawed

She doesn’t know where to start,

From her messed up hair

To her messed up heart.

 

Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary

Wishes her arms didn’t look so scary,

She’s holding more than she can carry,

Was told that blood isn’t sanitary.

 

She doesn’t see a point

To continue the fight.

When her restless days

Turn to restless nights.

Life isn’t always fair.

If anyone, she can tell.

They avoid going near her

And it hurts like hell.

She cries out in the rain;

“God, what was your cause?

Why did you put me here on earth

With so many flaws?

Was I part of a plan?

Or was I born just to die?

Will I impact the world

Or at least impact someone’s life?”

She doesn’t know how to live.

She’s never had anything to gain.

All she truly wants

Is for you to end her pain.

 

Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary

Wishes her arms didn’t look so scary,

She’s holding more than she can carry,

Was told that blood isn’t sanitary.

 

Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary;

She is quite a visionary,

The world is her adversary,

The tale of her life is cautionary. 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sylvia Plath- like....

she looks in the mirror, sees Bloody Mary---doesn't like what she sees on the outside or the inside...

"was told blood isn't sanitary"

as if she was unclean...people can be so mean....and just destroy our self-image...if we let them.

j.

[Black Widow]

Wait, you're saying I wrote a poem that similar to something Sylvia Plath wrote?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am saying this piece has shades of Sylvia Plath, echoes of what she was like and similar in theme to some of her poems...
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

even though it is a totally different piece, it reminded me a bit of "Mirror"---but more in some of the theme i took from it. It's a good write...

j.

[Black Widow]

Oh, I understand. And thank you so much for the compliment.
A lot of people just can't appreciate my work because they don't have an appreciation for rhyming poetry. Like my 11th grade English teacher.

Which I honestly understand because anyone can throw rhymes together, but that isn't what I do. I have to make sure I have a fully structured theme. And I have to have either a word or phrase to use as a "hook," which I will either repeat throughout the poem or use in the end in a dramatic type of way.
Obviously in this piece I obviously used the repetition method and my "hook" was using the words Bloody Mary.

[Ana B.]

I loved this. Beautifully done BW :) You are right, your stuff does sound like songs. Enjoyed pausing here.

[mum]

wow, i like the short lines . very beautiful but painful all at the same time . great job black widow

[Coyote Poetry]

Wow. Amazing poetry dear Lauren.
"Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary;
She is quite a visionary,
The world is her adversary,
The tale of her life is cautionary. "
I liked the use of the words "Bloody Mary". Giving strength and reason for the poetry. Please send read requests. I would like to read your work. Thank you for sharing the powerful poetry.
Coyote