Society Killed the Teenager

This is a piece I wrote about specific, existing subjects that many people find difficult to discuss. And how the intensity of a problem often reflects on people's failure to open up the dialect.

Don’t romanticize illness;

Don’t romanticize self-harm.

If you lost all of your control,

would you then be alarmed?

It’s the coffee every morning

that keeps you here, you find.

The rest of the time you’re crying

but it’s tears that are making you blind.

You have a stack of blades

hiding underneath your bed.

Today could create world peace

and you might end up dead.

Down the hatch go twenty pills,

so I’m unaffected by their drama.

Then you start to see flowery hills

but it’s likely to cause you trauma.

You stare endlessly at your blank wall

trying to find some glimmer of hope,

and nobody’s there to watch you fall

as you tie off the day with some dope.

Snap out of it, they say.

You wish they could get that it doesn’t work that way.

And that they could understand the hurtful things they say.

Parents don’t communicate

as their child grows,

and people tend to inch away

from a man in dirty clothes.

A woman talking to herself,

a young child points out.

A child who knows no evil,

just wonders what it’s about.

The mother makes something up

and the child thinks it’s true.

How shocking to the mother

when the child grows up to be you.

Author's Note

I'd love to receive as many opinions as I can get on this piece.
Also, I could desperately use advice on how to use this website. For example, if you have examples of fitting tags I should add to this piece, PLEASE share. I didn't know what to put in the tags section.

Reviews

[Dalton Lee]

I liked it. As someone who's struggled with some of the feelings herein, it felt refreshingly honest without being preachy - not the easiest task, but you pulled it off with aplomb. The flow faltered here and there, nothing a soft editing couldn't fix, but ultimately the message overpowers any technical flaws for me.

[Warrior]

strikingly true very direct and well written. It's sad though that this is true and the world just shoves it away with medication and says that it is a so-called disease which is bull s**t. Thank you for saying the truth.

[Black Widow]

I can't thank you all enough for your truly inspirational comments.

[APOORVA]

what a powerful poem, such an amazing work.
Don’t romanticize illness;

Don’t romanticize self-harm.

If you lost all of your control,

would you then be alarmed?

LOVED THESE LINES, WHAT AN AWESOME START.

You wish they could get that it doesn’t work that way.

And that they could understand the hurtful things they say.

Parents don’t communicate

as their child grows,

and people tend to inch away

from a man in dirty clothes.
SUCH A FAR SIGHTED THINKING, I LIKE THE WAY OF YOUR EXPRESSION

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You've certainly written about the topics most encountered yet the most neglected when it comes to actual implication of the solutions. Self harm, suicide, drug abuse, communication gaps, these may be unrelated but the outcome is the same.
I liked how you laid out to piece all this together.

In regard to your author's note, this website is pretty simple to use. Read more, learn more, that's what I would say. About tags, it doesn't really matter if you use them or not. Good works speak for themselves. The main aim of a tag is to give the reader idea about the topic on what the writer has written which sadly the genre section doesn't often provide..

Nicely penned :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and direct words. I liked them. You gave reasons and the why's of this world. I liked flow of statements leading to true ending. The poem is sharing knowledge and describing the appearance of the world to some. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote