The Attack

Two sisters were kidnapped, and were attacked by werewolves, they have to escape, and find there guardian.

Dark Nights              

    I woke up shackled to a chair, in another room, I heard voices a deep toned voice and a sharp high pitched one. The sharp high pitched voice I recognized with ease. It was my sister, Dawn, I started to hear her shriek in pain as a low growl erupted from the other room. All of a sudden a sort of instinct took over as if it was hidden away for so long, her shrieking started getting calmer as my body felt as if it was going through a change.
    My ankles started to fill out the shackles as I tried to remove them by kicking. A low growl emitted from the back of my throat, as I felt my body start thickening and growing muscles. I looked at my hands as long claws started to sprout under my nails, paws took place of my hands, as I started to change into a creature unknown to me, for what seemed like hours was actually minutes.
     The pain that over took my body was great, howls erupted from my chest making there way from my mouth. I panted as I stood on all fours and stretched out my tight muscles. I looked up and a large metal door stood in my way. I backed up a few feet as I leaned my head down like a bull would as it would start to charge.
    ’If I held my head down like this and ran at it the right angle when I swing my lower body around hitting it at the correct angle, I should knock it right off its hinges.’ I thought quietly to myself.
    I charged towards the door and swung my lower body around at the last minute as my pelvic came in contact with the door, it came right off its hinges.
     I heard Dawns shrieks of pain as I raced down the hall, stopping  abruptly as my breathing started to slow and become more quieter, I listened for more sounds coming from my younger sister.
    Dawn let out another loud shriek of pain as I bounded towards a large metal door her screams were coming from.
    I reared back slamming my back against the door, breaking it off its hinges.
     I snarled as I came face to face with a creature that looked exactly like me, in form, but different colors.
     I circled the figure in front of me as I waited for his first move. When he didn’t attack I lunged for his neck but was knocked away by his massive paw. I laid there for a few seconds as if I was dead. He approached my body ready to strike as I lunged for his neck he tried to swat me off of him but as he bucked my teeth went deeper into his skin.
    I snapped his neck with my powerful jaws, as he fell to the floor licked the blood off my fangs. I put my paw on his neck and ripped out his trachea with ease. I bent down and sniffed my paw licking off the blood. I let my anger go and I was standing on my own to feet again.
I looked over at my sister making sure she was alright. I seen a dried crimson shade of red on her shoulder.
    “Dawn!” I cried rushing over to her unconscious body. She had been knocked out. I looked down at my naked body and blushed at myself. I needed to find cloths, but I would have to worry about her first. I ran my hand through her chestnut shaded hair. I inspected her wound to make sure dirt hadn’t found its way inside.
    “It burns Ember.” She mumbled in her supposed sleep.
     I had to find cloths to wear now. I walked out of the cell and quietly searched each room for cloths. I came across a room full of leather vests and pants. I took them and dressed. I looked as if I was ready to battle a fierce creature. I put my black hair into a high ponytail.
    I leaped quietly out of the room, hurrying back to the room that held my sisters unconscious body.
    When I made it to the room she was awake and ready to go, she was in a fighting stance that she was taught along time ago by our father before he died. “Good girl, you are cautious.” I grinned slyly. “Father did teach you much.”
    “Yes he did, but, it wasn’t able to protect us, from, whatever happened to us.” She looked around the room confused.
    “I don’t remember how we even got here!” I exclaimed. “Neither do I,” Dawn replied in a small voice.
    “All I remember was walking in the forest with you to check out those funny sounds and I wake up here.” She gestured around the room. “Same here.” I placed my hands on my hips as I turned around. “Come on we are going to Zane’s.”
    “What, that crazy old coot?” Dawn hissed.
    “Zane isn’t a crazy old coot, he is our friend that has helped us through many illnesses and not to mention he took us in when mom and dad died, we owe are lives to that man. He has been our father for the past six years,” I shook my head turning towards her.
    “But we are taking care of ourselves now, what’s the big deal, why can’t we just make your remedy?” Dawn asked. “For this reason, I don’t have any remedies for this, everything I have ever learned came from, mom, dad, or Zane.” I turned back around as I started to walk out the door.
     “Come on we need to find our way out of here.” My brows knitted together as I searched rooms with windows or doors, to the outside.     “Ember!” Dawn called over to me. “What is it Dawn?” I questioned walking over to her.
     “Is this what you are looking for?” She questioned as she pointed in a corner, a window with bars was on the wall. “Yes, exactly what I was looking for.” I walked quietly over to the bared window and looked around for a flaw on it.
    “Dawn, do you have anything sharp?” I questioned. “I have my knife.” she grinned pulling the sliver blade from her pocket as I snatched it from her hand.
    I started removing screws and let the bars fall to the floor. I climbed onto the window and pushed off falling to the ground. I caught Dawn when she leaped from the window.
    “Come on, we have to hurry.” I gripped Dawns wrist and started running for the hills before us. If we got over the hills no one could catch up to us. We had finally climbed over the hill and came into a city. “Our town is that way.” I pointed to the south. I tugged Dawn along behind me as we hurried across the land. The town wasn’t far to the city, we ran until our feet grew tired.
    We rested for a few minutes, when our feet felt better we continued running. As the sun started to rise, I pointed to a small cottage. “Dawn, Zane’s house is just up ahead.” I sighed in relief to see the house not so far away. My breathing had already gotten ragged, from running most of the night. We were lucky enough that nothing was out there, that could attack us.
    I banged on Zane’s door fiercely with my fist. His door swung open and pulled us in side. “Ember, Dawn, thank goodness you are okay.” He hugged us close to his body. “I’m not exactly okay, as you would say.” I mumbled quietly.
    “What do you mean by that?” Zane drew back his head in confusion. “I was attacked by something.” I pulled down my tunic showing him the marks.
    “Werewolves.” He breathed. He looked both ways in shock, scared.
    “You know something, don’t you?” I questioned.

Author's Note

Ignore grammar and spelling problems.

Reviews

[JuliePetunia]

It seems a bit too fast paced and rushed, but maybe that's just me.
And I was just wondering, if Dawn had a knife all along, why didn't she just stab the guy that was in the cell with her?

[Arya_the_elven_lady]

Great start love it.

[.quan.011.]

This is a really go start it got my attention and I can't wait to read more.

[Snickers]

Also I will be fixing my errors, AFTER, I have finished the book. Okay?

[Snickers]

I have many errors, that i am aware of, I have yet, to fix them do to school, I am getting ready to take exams, which sucks.

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

this is interesting but there are quite a few problems. mainly its just the wrong word or its missing a word but there are other things too.
' "...sounds and I wake up here.” She gestured around the room. “Same here." ' the same here needs to be on a diffrent line at first its slightly confusing and as a genral rule there is a new line for a diffrent speaker. it seemed that Ember was doing alot and dawn nothing be carful let the other charictors do things too this is somthing even i need to watch when im writing. finaly avoide telling the reader somthing by telling another charictor somthing the village and the cottage location would have been obvious to Dawn if not then you need to say why try having Ember think the lcations rather than tell Dawn the obvious for the readers benifit. apart from that i enjoyed this chapter and its a good start to a promising book.

[Paul D. Aronson]

This story is off to a nice start. The key to an effective book is to hook the reader in the first chapter. You have plenty of action and set up the main characters quickly. Hope to see you continue with this.

[Member Now Left]

Hey, this is really good. It held my attention and I like the fast pace of it. I really like your writing style :-)

[Daydreamer54]

Intresting story! u descrie the change nicely! i thought that her sister would be too weak to stand or something like that since she was hurt. Oh and then ur going all biology on us by mentioning the word pelvic and tranchea. :P Reading on!