Masquerade

Pretty naive girl

with your pretty unstained dress

Won't you dance with me?

Your innocence says yes

Welcome to my ball...

He whispers in your ear

I call it World,

be careful they sense fear...

Eyes so wide, heart so loud

as you're spun across the floor

Blurred images pass by

Can you really be sure?

Who are the monsters?

Who are the saints?

Whose mask is real?

Whose mask is fake?

Each face is smiling

yet how can you tell

Whose smile is wicked?

Deceit's done so well...

Such a happy little girl

In the hands of Lie

He seems so wonderful

by the glimmer in his eye

He dips you suddenly

sweet breath on your skin

confusing your mind

not seeing the sin

Lie's World is wonderful

He's charmed your soul

It's too late when you realize

His actual goal

The decorations are garbage

Shiny junk for your attention

Truth wasn't even invited

He wasn't even mentioned

This masquerade, this World

You fell into it's trance

From the moment Lie grinned

and asked you to dance...

Author's Note

http://m.youtube.com/index?&desktop_uri=%2F

Something I came up with while sleep deprived xD

Hahaha one of my all time favorite movies...I was watching it the other day and it reminded me of this poem....unfortunately I can't figure out how to copy the actual video I wanted for this(via tablet), so to find out what I'm referring to...copy the link xD

Reviews

[Geon Quuin]

This one reminds me of the Phantom of the Opera. There's a song called "Masquerade" and everyone was wearing masks, obviously, and dancing and they're all fancy and stuff. I really like this one. Although there's a social commentary in this one, it felt, I don't know, warm and lighthearted--for some reason. Either way, it's a good write.

[Serenity Faith]

Thank you, teehee I didnt even think of The Phantom of the Opera, what came to mind for me was Labrynth, with David Bowie as the goblin king ^_^ I posted a link to youtube with one of my favorite scenes and songs from that movie.

[Geon Quuin]

If only she didn't listen to the worm, she would've saved her baby brother in no time. but then again, that would've been a boring movie. Fairies will bite you hard if you mess with them.

[Serenity Faith]

Oh...my god....you are so fully awesome! >< I kind of have a bit of an old/kid like soul. How old are you again? Not many people my age even know what that movie is! And yes, if she'd listened to the worm, I'd say she'd have traveled better lol

[Serenity Faith]

She'd not listen*

[Geon Quuin]

My ex girlfriend is kind of a little kid. She made me watch it. She likes watching little kids movies. I think her favorite movies are The Last Unicorn, Quest to Camelot, and the Labyrinth. She also likes musicals like Sweeney Todd, Burlesque, Phantom of the Opera, Across the Universe.

[Geon Quuin]

Also, I'm only 19 years old.

[Geon Quuin]

you? how young are you?

[Serenity Faith]

.....please dont be offended when I say this, but your ex has pretty darn good taste in movies...as im a tim burton kind of gal as well >< and I really really wanna see burlesque lol. You're just too cool. And even though those are little kids movies...the first ones anyways...they were all 80s movies so normally people our age, dont really know of them unless they were just dorks like me or had older sinlings like me lol

[Serenity Faith]

Siblings*

[Serenity Faith]

Haha im 21, just recently turned xD why how old do I seem?

[Geon Quuin]

I'm not offended. I still love her. We still hang out from time to time. I can't believe I found someone who's like my ex girlfriend. I thought I'd never find someone like her. You just made my day. Do you like dancing? Like going to rave and stuff?

[Geon Quuin]

You look 17.

[Serenity Faith]

Oh my god....I LOVE dancing...ive always wanted to go to a rave or a club or something, but my husband would never let me or go with me. Before I had my daughter, I had scholarships for dancing and acting to schools in New York. My momma made me turn them down though, and told me to wait for those after I graduated high school, but unfortunately, ive always been working to take care of everything. Im glad I could make your day ^_^

[Geon Quuin]

I could somewhat relate to that. I turned down a scholarship to an Art University in California just to be with my ex.

[Serenity Faith]

So you draw?

[Geon Quuin]

Not just draw, I paint! I started with landscapes. then moved on to portraits. then back to landscapes. then seascapes. then abstract. now I've been in a long 2 year hiatus. Haven't touched a brush since.

[Serenity Faith]

Oh wow! I love to draw...my real dad had a knack for painting....teehee...i have an interesting idea...I'll message you it.

[BlackRose]

Yes, its me. The one with the typewriter poem you loved some months back. And still happy you loved it. Love this. It seems we at some point encounter the LIE at some point in our lives, lol. Reminds of when I saw Phantom of the Opera.

[EMF]

Sleep deprevation has worked wonders but not to be repeated often. A superb write. A reminder of what the quality of your work is like. Truly stunning work

[Pikachu]

Whoa!

See, I wish I could write poems.. .-.

But, alast!

I loved it, the feel of it, the discriptions are amazing! Please keep writing!

[quarintine_deathangel]

as your spun across the floor; your should be you're
Deceits done so well...; Deciet's
by the glimmer in his eye; just a suggestion, to keep the rythm you might want to do 'by his glimmering eye'
Excellent poem! You feel like you're dancing around in circles when you read it. I loved the experience and imagery in the words! Awesome job writing! I find the sleep deprived writings to usually work out well XD I hope the editing helps but you're the writer so you don't have to change it. FYI I'm totally sharing this to my Facebook and others on writers cafe ^.

[Serenity Faith]

Thank you so much ^_^ I appreciate the corrections and have fixed them. I'm thrilled you liked it!

[quarintine_deathangel]

You're welcome! /[!.!]

[Dr. Wood ?]

all the best ideas come at that time....something to do with the brain being relaxed...good stuff this...

[Cole Hayley]

you should be sleep deprived more often. that was a powerhouse from you, I loved every word.

[Brandon Mathis]

another great poem from you nicely written if i might say

[Nath]

I have often found sleep-deprivation to be a great inspiration and inspiration to be a reason for sleep-deprivation.
Anyway, this is a great result of an unfortunate lack of sleep!
I like how you personify the Lie and the Truth and let your obviously inexperienced protagonist fall for the former. Innocent naivty can really get you into a hell lot of trouble. Though sometimes it really is hard to tell what's real and what is not, I think some healthy mistrust can really save you at times.
Either way, wonderful work, thanks for sharing!

[Rhianne Ney]

This is a good and expressive and interesting write
96/100
Please keep writing