Darkness Incarnate [part II]

This is part 2 of my original poem "Darkness Incarnate". Link is in author's note.

Tempered obscurity,

my own righteous domain.

Stealthy anxieties

undoubtedly drain.

Diminishing fire in

a world of debris.

No longer a light

shining in me.

Deeper into the well,

only few could fathom.

Darkness incarnate,

giving in to the phantom.

A doll on a shelf,

felt fractured and crude.

Demonic highways

through darkness protrude.

I’m my own phantom,

familiar, yet new.

If I can’t save me,

then who?

Poisoned thoughts

inside of my head,

The scars begin to hurt,

once more filled with dread.

Author's Note

Part 1 [ original ] http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Scarlet-Winter/705283/

So, I haven't been in a writing mood much and I'm feeling really depressed without it. So I looked up some tips for writing and it said "When nothing is coming, start writing very fast. Write down any and every word, phrase or sentence that comes to mind. Do that for about a minute before you go back to working on your poem. I call this trick flushing. Feel free to use anything you came up with, but the purpose of flushing is to clear your head."

So I tried it, and the words I wrote down reminded me of the poem I wrote about a year or so ago "Darkness Incarnate". It also said that I shouldn't be afraid to write a bad poem and I just have to keep writing even if I write 100 bad poems before I get a good one out. This is a bad poem, I'll be the first to admit it. But the thing is, I love writing. It's who I am and it's what people know me as is an artist and a writer. I wrote the first part to this poem when I was in a really bad place mentally and I'm slowly reverting back to that place and that's why I wrote a second part. I don't think the first piece needed a second part, but I may come back change this one once I get back into writing and feeling what I'm used to feeling while writing. I just feel like I've reverted back at least 4-5 years in my writing and I hate that feeling. However, this will be the last creation I post on this account. My writing has changed. I've noticed that and so have a few other people and they've pointed it out. I wasn't ready for a sudden change but I guess it has to happen to make me a better writer. So after I have a few poems written once I figure out this new style that my mind is playing with, I will create a new account and leave this one as is [ I'll come back to check things from time to time ]. Though, I'm only going to tell probably one person what that other account is because I don't have a good reputation with this name or account because of some issues in the past and it's not going to go away. I feel like people are still judging me and not my writing.

Reviews

[Mashairi]

Very well written. The rhythm is constant and as beautiful as the piece itself. Everything about it is beautiful. Well done :)

[RedInk524]

Dark. You are changing in style, i love it. The atmosphere of your poems have gotten heavier and your wording has become more depressed. You are starting to sound like me, lol. Which is awesome, just like this poem of yours. I dont think its bad, i love the despair and short lines. The diction is very effective.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poetry is a constant experience to create. A writer's hope he can get the attention of readers. I like the word written with skill also. The poem was dark with a hard journey. Sometime we end up in the wrong places. Scars are proof of a life lived with hunger and no fear. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Little Birdie]

Very dark, it in fact takes great skill to convey emotions that run so deeply seared. I don't know who would judge you, your emotions are yours, your issues are yours, your writing is yours, and whoever is judging you should step back and reconsider why are they doing it.
As for the poem, great job. I always enjoy reading your things.

[BrynnaW.]

Very well done! You did an excellent job on this poem and I really enjoy reading it! Great job and keep on writing!

[Jazique]

Wow darkness Incarnate right. Well done with descriptions and all and the words how they went to gether creating something very interesting a very dark mood as you say depressed and you're right about that writing things down fast no matter what it is is so right as what I'd done many times. Anyways not judging you nicely done to your poem as it showed true creativity and expression. Excelent and bravo! to you