Do You See Me?

When you look at me,

you see a smile,

but never the memories

treading the mile.

Do you dare venture

beyond the facade?

Do you sense the walls?

I’m forming my own barricade.

Will you be the hand,

that carries me out of despair?

In this picture, do you see

a soul incapable of repair?

Can you see the nights

I’ve cried myself to sleep?

Or the numerous times,

I was forced to climb a mountain steep?

Do you see the love I have

for every person I’ve never met?

Do you see the pain left

from those I wish I could forget?

Do you dare venture

beyond the facade?

Are you too, living your life,

a masquerade.

Author's Note

It's short, yeah, but whatever.

*Me in the picture. It inspired the poem.*

Reviews

[RedInk524]

I love it, it is short and straightforward. Very gloomy with a touch of hoplessness, but at the same time i can see a faint shimmer of hope in it. I like the rhetorical questioning, it pulls the reader in and forces them to look through your eyes. And the facade metaphor added a universiality to the poem. To sum it it up, excellent. Now a new favorite of yours.

[rainingwaterfall]

great poem

[sarah]

Wow this is really moving, I really like how you put this together. And the heartfelt honesty blew me away, this is a magically, sad and deep write! Great work!

[KarmaHope]

Living life as a masquerade. It's an interesting concept, and one that I liken to. If one doesn't live their life showing their true self, it might as well just be a masquerade ball, where you can't see anyone else, and they can't see you. Interesting. I'll have to ponder that.

But still, beautiful poem. I truly enjoyed it.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Beautiful poem! I loved this. Nice picture too!
Your poem is very straight forward. I love the emotions tied to this piece. It truely shows well. It's quite relatable. I love the questions.. it makes us, readers, ponder and think. For me, yes. It's hard to reveal yourself to everyone. Often times, it's only a small amount of people are chosen to see our true self. The people we trust enough to tell everything to.. to share our hidden secrets to. It's hard to open up.. or at least that's how I am. But anyways, this is simply fantastic! =D Great job writing. I enjoyed it.

[Que]

I loved it, especially the way you used your words and created a wonderful image in my mind. You transmitted emotion perfectly.
Cheers and have a good day. :)

[Dearantlers]

Pretty picture!

This is beautiful, and so full of emotion like always! I love your writing style, and want to read more! It's a great write, and I loved the poem. I especially loved the rhyming scheme. Thanks for sharing!

[Matt "Mickey" Denney]

I really like your writing. You don't hide behind it and are very expressive!

[Coyote Poetry]

World is different. People are close-up and we allow few people into our life. I like this poem. Open up the doors to many questions. Most people hide behind masquerade to be safe from showing their real emotions. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jazique]

Nice inspiring yourself and might I say you were a great inspiration because that was a wonderful poem that rhymed so wonderful. Well done with the word play and all. Excellent job as i just had to smile at the end with the question of "Are you too, living your life a masquerade?" For yes, yes I am living a life of masquerade and I show true self to you to say "Bravo."