My Father's Greatest Mistake

For my father. Read author's Note.

You’ve condemned me a fool.

Made the same mistakes

too many times.

Shattered a world,

in which I tried to survive.

Destroyed the idea I had of a father

I should have denied.

 

She was once your princess.

Now she’s a woman,

not knowing she deserves more.

She settles for a man that’s just like you,

because you never told her

she shouldn’t be treated as a w***e.

Made her believe she was cracked,

and she needed to be fixed.

She didn’t care to look

beyond your mask,

she goes on thinking

she’s nothing more than trash.

She can’t see who she can become,

because you never pointed her

in the right direction.

But my big sister was your greatest mistake.

 

You’ve condemned me a fool.

Made the same mistakes

too many times.

Shattered a world,

in which I tried to survive.

Destroyed the idea I had of a father

I should have denied.

 

She was once your little girl,

now she’s nineteen and

faces the world alone.

She cuts away the flaws

that you pointed out.

She doesn’t know that she’s perfect,

because you never told her so.

She doesn’t trust a man,

because she believes that all men leave.

You shaped her future,

and taught her that women

deserve to be beat.

She’s afraid of love

and you wrote that book.

You can’t see that her shell can never crack.

But my little sister was your greatest mistake.

 

You’ve condemned me a fool.

Made the same mistakes

too many times.

Shattered a world,

in which I tried to survive.

Destroyed the idea I had of a father

I should have denied.

 

She was once your baby girl.

She was two years old

when you walked out the door.

A little girl needs her father

to be the hero that fights off

the demons under her bed.

He isn’t supposed to be the one

living inside her head.

The shadow of a man

that she’ll never encounter.

By staying out of her life,

did you think it wouldn’t affect her?

She wants to know you, but she’s scared.

She’s only heard stories

that everyone else knows and shares.

But my baby sister was your greatest mistake.

 

You’ve condemned me a fool.

Made the same mistakes

too many times.

Shattered a world,

in which I tried to survive.

Destroyed the idea I had of a father

I should have denied.

 

I tried to be daddy’s little girl.

I tried to live inside of your world.

You pushed me out

and I locked away my tears.

I have the memories of you

engraved in my flesh.

I’ve been drawing your story

on my arm for years.

It’ll continue to grow

even after you pass.

I still tried to look past your flaws.

I tried to love you,

because that what a daughter does.

But now, I’m driving you out of MY world.

You’re selfish, and you won’t ever see,

I was your greatest mistake.

 

You’ve condemned me a fool.

Made the same mistakes

too many times.

Shattered a world,

in which I tried to survive.

Destroyed the idea I had of a father

I should have denied.

 

Author's Note

This isn't the greatest, it was really just me getting out my frustrations in the best way I know how.

Reviews

[RedInk524]

I love rants, especially when i am familiar with the topic. It really is disgraceful for a man to act that way. No wait, he isnt a man. But a kid who refuses to grow up. He doesnt deserve a fraction of what he has or had. What kind of person abandons thier own family? A person who isnt worth the breath they exhale! It is pathetic and almost horrifying what he does with the time he should be and should have been doing taking care of his family.

[The Analog Kid]

Very powerful rant. I like the repetition of "You condemed me a fool." One thing I would always treasure is my daughter.

[KarmaHope]

It hurts to think that there are so many people with stories like yours. I guess I truly am lucky to have a great family. Still, It's always a good thing to get your feelings onto paper (or onto the screen) rather than keeping them bottled up inside.

For that, I commend you. Good job. No, Great job.

[Dearantlers]

Wow. That is so full of emotion, that it's so easy to feel it. And it's soo sad. This is gorgeous, and a beautiful write! Thanks for sharing!

[Coyote Poetry]

Negative words and treatment bring separation and misery only. The poem story was powerful and sad. Sometime you must overcome words of Fool's and be content with your life. The poem is outstanding. Wisdom can be learn from the words. Be kind and gentle with the people you love and care for.
Coyote

[TheConjuringCat]

You said it wasn't your greatest, but I think it is. You couldn't have expressed the emotions better and your frustration and anger are very clear. It flows great and was very well-written. I hope things work out for you and you show him what he's missing!

[Alicia Hirshey]

I love your rants. I can always feel your anger and it kinda becomes my own. Know that I love you, no matter what you do nor what lay ahead.

[CrimsonDecorum]

I don't realize how lucky I am to have a sober father. I mean, I don't treat my parents the way I should and this song and poem makes me realize that I'm so blessed to have parents the way they are.

Really good rant-flow poem.