Discarded Hurt

"It's sad when friends become enemies. But what's even worse is when they become strangers." - Hayley Williams

Butterfly kisses and eye lash wishes.

Kitty whiskers and a glossy stone.

Sunkissed lemon drops,

buried memories in a grave unknown.

Downward spiraling of a controversial hold.

Taunting dialogues of two girls lost.

An alliance forgotten, though 

emotions are quarantined, not tossed.

A longing for the memoirs, 

forever hiding the hurt.

Dropping all the photographs, 

covering them in dirt.

Counting petals on every stem, 

assuring the sound of forget-me-nots.

A silent cry drowns in hushed prayers.

Alike an apple, our fickle corpse rots.

Rebirth is indefinite.

A shallow hole consuming sacred souls.

Haunting diaries are a secret form.

Innocent banter of which my heart tolls.

Discarded emotions, 

a monotonous tone.

A grinding pain of missed adventures 

cutting deeper, sawing the bone.

A vacuum seal 

leaking deafening shrills, 

baring the marks 

of a pain that kills.

Author's Note

First poem I've written in probably a year. It's not great...just something to try and get out of my Writer's Block funk =/

Reviews

[Rhianne Ney]

No, actually it was great( for me, yay! ) I don't know why but it touched me, and aw man, it sucks to have some writer's block. I'd die if I experience that again. Believe me, dude. I went through the same trouble and it doesn't feel great at all. It's like I'm missing something...


So, here's my thoughts about this:

You're probably right by the lines that when people are no longer they became strangers. Sad story and definitely heartbreaking. I do have a friend which drifted away from me and conversations between us were awkward and sometimes I don't have any topic at all. But anyways, I would never forget the times that we treasured the most. Some broken relationships can be mended, actually...

100/100

~Keep writing~

[Casper Dumass Lecroix]

Pretty damn good

[RedInk524]

Oboi, after nearly a year am I really reading a new poem!? Yes! And of course, your opinion of your work is like an anorexic's view of her body. This is nowhere near as bad as you think. I like it. And it is nice to see something new from you after so long. Your mind bending work was much missed! I like this and will favorite, keep writing and try not to be so harsh on yourself. :)

[WynterPhoenix]

Thanks ^_^ I combined two poems I never finished and then changed some of the wording and finished it with a few more lines. o.o Now I'm tired :o

[RedInk524]

That was surprisingly effective. I've done that before too, lol. That and combined multiple unused lines or stanzas to make like a frankenpoem. XD