Whispers

reiterating

the air carrying

with it

the silent whispers

it always does,

and like ghosts they swirl

around each and everyone,

the air polluted

with the

invisble bunch,

each one

a part of the soul

the take,

and one in stagnation

abandoned

remains...

Reviews

[ReversingEvolution4TheB..]

Uh oh...

You've gotten a little sloppy with this one. It's a great poem, but could use a little more work.

GOOD: You can feel the imagery as well as see it. It flows nicely, and again, stimulates the mind.

BAD: Grammar, grammar, grammar! Your potential to be a great poet is only being hindered by your grammatical errors. If it's your style, then I'm sure others will rate you higher for this piece.

I'm going to give you a 90/100 for this piece. You did quite well poetically. Grammatically you need some work. My opinion should be null and void if this is your set-in-stone style.

Write On!

[bookworm642]

Very good poem...I think it had a really good flow! I felt like I could actually see/hear/feel the whispers in my head

[Sharkapillar]

Wow. It's simple, yet beautiful. Each line flows perfectly to the next, and it's just...beautiful. Fantastic job.