Motionless

for the people who are out there.. and been through the same.. for the people out there.. that are never heard... Dont review me with nice, because im sure to kick you!

The red velvet 
Gliding along the table paws,
Slowly dripping on the ground

Red velvet creating a pool,
while there is no sound,
the sushed words to the little child
hidden under bed,
his mother, making these little sounds

The footsteps on the floor
The heavy breath without a word,
The softly crying child
Her covered mouth

The person walking around,
the banging, the unberable walking sound,

The souftly smuthered child
Never more able to make a sound
Her mom didn't notice
She was just waiting until the silent sounds

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

This was a little hard to take, but it is an amazing write!

[Tai Ryens]

Amazing write, I like this one. Your use your words in a clever way, and you put some nicely painted images in my mind. I do hope you continue to write!

[Dove]

Woah, you are very good with your use of words... this is a spectacular poem. All of your work is well written. Please keep sending me readers requests because i truly do love reading your work you are wonderful writer. I also like the imagery you used and this is such a powerful piece of writing.

[amdc101]

You describe this horrible experience in such a beautiful way. Ironic. So incredible and amazing, WRITE MORE!!!

[BrynnaW.]

Okay, so apparently I shall have the longest comment! :) You finally wrote something! Thank you!!! Glad you sent me an RR, I was beginning to get eager. :) You write such lovely, well written poems that my mouth just drops open and makes me feel brain dead. You truly are a wonderful poet that I admire. How these ideas come to your mind I will never know. Overall, you are an excellent poet and judging by the comments below, they think so too. Very good job. As usual, your poems entertain me and make me want to read more of your work only, you don't have much else!! :) Again, good job. It was sad and an experience that none would ever want to go through. I look forward to more of your work. Keep on writing!!!! Seriously!

[joshua deathdealer]

I really like this write Black...great imagery.

Wonderful Black, as you're! in our language, " GOED WERK "

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Wow this is powerful stuff and I'm thinking of a real bad childhood that no one should ever experience...

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such a wonderful write, This is really good.

[stars are far]

this was amazing ..
great work :D