"I like the logic of this poem.
You need a friend,
a lover,
or maybe someday
the strength will be in me!"
Thank you for the excellent poem. We need friends to make us complete. Few people can find happiness and success alone.
Coyote
Really nice write. I enjoyed its length. It was short but very much to the point. I also felt it adequately conveyed its message and expressed emotion. I think some people will be able to relate to needing this sort of "strength" in their life. After all I feel it is always good to have someone to lean on.
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I like how your poem starts with a problem and then leads into thoughts of a solution =] great imagery as well =] good write all round =]
A nice poem. I think we all need some of the strength you seek. Perhaps if you find it you would care to share?
Though others might point out mistakes of spelling or grammar, I believe that when it comes to poetry it doesn't matter as much. That is, not unless you plan to have it published or the mistakes mutilate the language. Thankfully that is not the case here and we are left with an all around good poem.
There are way too many poem of 'Life Help' principles on writerscafe for me to enjoy them very much any more. For its own merit, yes, it is a good poem, but amongst so much growing competition on this website, to stand out you really need to work very hard and make sure you get all the main points of a good poem taken care of. I mean, its an alright poem, but a little to vague and 'well-intentioned' for me to like. Too sickly sweet. Daniel
I'm now a 19 year old :P (cough so old cough :P)
For the once who didn't figure out, I am of course a girl
I love writing,
In english though i'm dutch,
That probably makes me crazy!
I always en.. more..